regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.20.5.229	26-May-04/5:44 AM
Bob Dylan meets Laurel and Hardy...i will give you a spin....7
Re: Suicide of the Ego by Drifting Shadow	edpeterson 68.20.5.229	26-May-04/5:47 AM
ugh...
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.20.5.229	26-May-04/5:50 AM
not bad...the wording is a bit confusing at times and the middle could stand a little touching up...perhaps shave a few articles or pronouns....it has real potential, and i am looking forward to seeing it develop...interesting poem.
Re: The Babe in the Alligator Pajamas by caitydee	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	26-May-04/5:52 AM
That's right! Your life has utterly failed, so why not produce another miniature failure in an unbelievably misguided attempt to fix it? 10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Re: Humpty Dumpty's Regrettable Fate by MacFrantic	zodiac 66.0.86.62	26-May-04/8:47 AM
Your persistent use of the limerick to write on non-limerick (i.e., non lewd or funny) themes will be your enduring contribution to literature. Cherish it, my friend.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 66.0.86.62	26-May-04/9:02 AM
Doesn't anybody on this site lead something other than a utterly pathetic existence? Oh, no, wait - we're all on the internet.
regarding some deleted poem...	caitydee 152.163.252.165	26-May-04/9:14 AM
Its amazing how the feeling of being "enough" or the desire to be enough can be totally consuming, I like the first half of this and I feel like you have read my mind of some of these, but skip the last line, I want you to yell this at him not ask for him to mold you into what he wants!
Re: The Folded Ways Your Eyes Cave by horus8	zodiac 66.0.86.62	26-May-04/9:21 AM
The only part of this that isn't ace is "to beg and crave". No, I don't know how to fix it.
Re: The Folded Ways Your Eyes Cave by horus8	zodiac 66.0.86.62	26-May-04/9:25 AM
Maybe you could do something like, "If you thought I was going to beg, to crave You, guess again, because I cannot stand..." And I like "way" better than "ways".
Re: Lorca: Canción del Jinete by Sasha	god'swife 4.232.69.30	26-May-04/9:39 AM
This is a damn good translation. One of the best I've ever seen, and I've seen tons. Now whether or not you should call it "both of ours" is beyond my rights to decide. My guts tell me your trampling on the genius of another, but on the other hand you've done an excellent, and I do mean excellent, job of maintaining the tone of the original, and still you have created verse that stands on it's own "English" merits. So i can see why you feel some sense of ownership. It's a tough call. I give you a ten because it works beautifully as a translation, and you did mark it as "Other" when catagorizing it. Perhaps Mr. Kaolinfire can add it as a catagory.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.232.69.30	26-May-04/9:51 AM
This is not poetry. This is a draft which could become anything; A monologue, An essay, a suicide note, a skit on SNL, or perhaps even, yes, a po-em. At it stands it is merely a verbal blood-letting. A purging of pain, la-de-da.
Re: The Folded Ways Your Eyes Cave by horus8	francis nor capule 210.23.227.51	26-May-04/10:12 AM
the folded way your eyes caved.... nice
Re: your worth to me by francis nor capule	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	26-May-04/10:55 AM
pretty. What's with the spaces before commas sometimes?
Re: hoping by francis nor capule	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	26-May-04/10:57 AM
francis... what blinding and deafening love hath inspired this?
Re: What bianca saw!!! by titan69	DR Limerick 62.31.29.97	26-May-04/11:48 AM
this is just the sort of cheaky poem i like 10
Re: Oh No! by foothangingoutofass	Phalkon 152.163.252.165	26-May-04/11:57 AM
damn... but you said "bottom" so i'll give you a 1 -end transmission-
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	26-May-04/12:05 PM
I really like this: Elton John plays in my mind, And I guess that’s why they call it the blues.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	26-May-04/12:07 PM
That was on The Sopranos last week. :0)
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	26-May-04/12:22 PM
tequila....my arch-nemesis....once again you worm your way back into my life...bastardo.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	26-May-04/12:24 PM
Who was it that sang that song "We've Only Just Begun"? Olivia Newton John? I don't know.... Anyway, another good one.