Re: death makes me vain! by SweetJuliet10	zodiac 67.240.155.125	14-May-04/4:28 AM
Hey, wow! I can tell your contribution to poemranker is going to be valuable and interesting! Except for the fact that you're going to leave in a week without even bothering to change your username to 'Deleted User' when you find your poems can't receive any 'constructive criticism' here.
Re: untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10	zodiac 67.240.155.125	14-May-04/4:39 AM
I read "my soldier/husband" as "my soldier and/or my husband". Am I to understand that you have your own soldier in addition to having a husband? How does that work, exactly? Is he an "Army of One"? I suppose you might have meant "my soldier divided by my husband," but if you divide a soldier by a husband, what is the result? A bit of body armor, testosterone, and barely-concealed homoerotic tendencies over 1, I imagine.
Re: untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.225	14-May-04/4:58 AM
Thoughts (Free verse) by nicole081083 As I lie here in my bed Many thoughts run through my head --------------------------------------------------------------------- wait for sleep (Lyric) by xunitedx i wait for sleep as i'm lying in my bed but i can't stop these thoughts from running through my head --------------------------------------------------------------------- Insomnia (Pimple) by BiggRobb Every night that I lay down to bed, I'm constantly bombarded with thoughts racing through my head; --------------------------------------------------------------------- Adam's Apple (Lyric) by hotwire Not enough words rush through my head as I laid spend there in my bed --------------------------------------------------------------------- Falling in Love (Free verse) by disturbedone182 I lie awake for hours upon my bed While thoughts of her race through my head --------------------------------------------------------------------- untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband (Free verse) by SweetJuliet10 sitting here tonight alone in bed a million things running through my head -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	francis nor capule 210.23.227.51	14-May-04/4:59 AM
mmmm, familiarity breeds contempt? he hee
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	Stephen Robins 195.92.198.75	14-May-04/5:14 AM
That is splendid. So you have time to write that but no time for a mug of wallop later in inner temple? You shameful fraud!
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	14-May-04/5:19 AM
I declare it to be the most whimsical jape of the season!!! -6-
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	zodiac 67.240.192.159	14-May-04/5:19 AM
Ace!
Re: A Valley Girl's Rendition of "Fire and Ice." by Enkidu	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	14-May-04/5:24 AM
Pure comedy gold!!@!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "Like" -- ROFL TO THE MAX!
Re: Johnny Neurotic by Enkidu	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	14-May-04/5:26 AM
"Bill and Ted's: Enormously Mind-Numbing Adventure" Where do you get all this great material from?!?!?!1
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	14-May-04/5:41 AM
Nice, sparse - very much like the word "Sleam" have you tried it without any punctuation?
Re: untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10	edpeterson 68.79.27.79	14-May-04/5:48 AM
very funny this one. Untitled, followed by a title. if i had not read this, i would not believe that it could be written.
Re: Tasha:dedicated to my dear friend by SweetJuliet10	edpeterson 68.79.27.79	14-May-04/5:50 AM
furious with god...always have memories.... really special. best poem i have read in a long time. -0-
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	14-May-04/5:50 AM
s-6 L-1 hiccup. Nicely done.
Re: feelings of the inside by SweetJuliet10	edpeterson 68.79.27.79	14-May-04/5:52 AM
take some tylenol, then take a class in English Fundamentals.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	14-May-04/5:56 AM
Since Sasha has a Villanelle up, I would recommend trying to reform this into one. Play with it. I like the content, but I think you could lose the (zen).
Re: untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	14-May-04/6:14 AM
I'M GOING TO THROW YOU A LIFE PRESERVER!!! PUT IT ON!!! Buy a copy of : Poetry for dummies. No, I'm not kidding. and some poetry to read. rummage through the section at the library for something you like. read. practice. Then rewrite this and do your Valiant husband the justice he deserves. Because, while heartfelt, this is not poetry. Most 'rankers will write 10 pieces, only one of which will be worth rewriting or posting. Get used to it. It's work.
Re: Diane Keaton's Tits by JoyLuck	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	14-May-04/6:16 AM
Wow. I guess there really isn't enough room for I have a fat back. I thought bins were bigger. hmmm.
Re: Fear by Phalkon	zodiac 67.240.192.111	14-May-04/6:16 AM
What do you mean by "my fears begin to forte"? The most logical explanation I can come up with is that you're using some kind of obsolete olden verb meaning "to builde a [sofa cushion] fortresse." Is this the case?
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.192.111	14-May-04/6:25 AM
1) Where are you getting this stuff about Aboriginals dropping hints into abysses? 2) Why does everyone on this site insist on ending a metaphor with "but this is not [whatever the metaphor was]"? 3) I knew a guy who passed a pink coil once after drinking a hideous concoction of olive oil, grapefruit juice, and wormroot. Living in this part of the south you see that kind of thing pretty often. 4) Gravity doesn't do anyone's dirty work. Women work against gravity, which is defined as the inverse relationship between age and the distance separating a womans breasts from her knees. 5) Congratulations on not using an adjective noun title.
Re: A Valley Girl's Rendition of "Fire and Ice." by Enkidu	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 212.219.223.8	14-May-04/7:06 AM
I always thought this use of "like" came from Australia. Did it migrate there from California or vice versa? Or did they emerge independently? -6-