Re: Bracelets In A Box by cuddlytiger17	Sasha 69.138.236.63	10-May-04/1:07 PM
Ann, you might want to try writing poems on a subject other than lost love. Teen romance is overdone by so many and in such a mediocre manner that it has become an automatic cliché. I'm giving you fair warning: Many other people on this site will be very impolite in telling you what they think of poems like this.
Re: A Portrait of Antonio Machado (Edit) by Sasha	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:07 PM
This is a really good poem but unfortunately I have a very short attention span...
Re: Graffito Murder by Don-Quixote	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:11 PM
Interesting...
regarding some deleted poem...	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:13 PM
this is scary...:/
Re: Despair by Caducus	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:19 PM
Awww, i feel so much sympathy for the speaker...I can relate on many levels and this is such a sincere poem. The only critcism i have is that a few lines i stumbled over, they didn't flow as smoothly. Otherwise, I commend you on this.
Re: I'm not afraid to admit that I am attracted to Robe Lowe by RO-B-LOWE ME PLEASE	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:20 PM
Uh...?
Re: blink by VorioBuche	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:23 PM
I admire you for your blunt wording. You say what you mean without holding back. Everything flows so smoothly, its a real piece of work. Congrats!
Re: Mislead by PK	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:25 PM
You have so much emotion into this, it really grabs the readers attention. I like it a lot!!!
Re: no name by ~ska~	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:27 PM
I don't know, certain parts just don't seem to fit together right...It seems like you tried a little too hard or something...
Re: Karma by blankel	cuddlytiger17 64.80.246.102	10-May-04/1:34 PM
I REALLY like this poem!!! I don't care what anyone else says, You've got it together! LOL theres no need to say anything else!
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	10-May-04/2:05 PM
I would suggest taking this down before you get the happy plagiarist award for submitting a Pedro The Lion song. Unless, of course, you are Pedro the Lion...in which case, allis forgiven.
Re: Its raining by caitydee	Sasha 69.138.236.63	10-May-04/4:08 PM
A bit sappy but alright.
regarding some deleted poem...	Spindle 68.83.2.194	10-May-04/4:11 PM
you can try to be unique not one person like yourself you're really really different just like EVERYBODY ELSE! This is really great. Certainly the best part of the whole poem.
Re: Bodies Bore Like I Do Too by fevriere	Sasha 69.138.236.63	10-May-04/4:11 PM
What? Okay, after the 4th re-read I happened to get it. Not bad
Re: Intervention by livingcanvas	Spindle 68.83.2.194	10-May-04/4:14 PM
asking 'Could I possibly be next?' This sounds rather choppy. You may want to work on your rhyme scheme. All in all I liked it
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 69.138.236.63	10-May-04/4:18 PM
Excellently done Especially good rhymes
regarding some deleted poem...	caitydee 205.188.116.68	10-May-04/5:12 PM
I really enjoyed this-the rhymes and imagery are effective, good job.
Re: untitled lyric by jsd	caitydee 205.188.116.68	10-May-04/5:32 PM
theres some really good stuff here, i think you were able to express your thoughts well, it was a nice read, well done
Re: After the ice season ~ shamelessly lewd revision by zodiac	Sasha 69.138.236.63	10-May-04/5:19 PM
Very ephemeral, but still grounded in reality. Good, especially with the natural rhymes There's a palpable but faint feeling feeling here of Fitzgerald's: "A book of verses underneath the bough A jug of wine, a loaf of bread, and thou Beside me singing in the wilderness And wilderness is paradise enow."
Re: Don't Let Your Ass Get Hit By the Door by Spindle	wilco 24.176.102.131	10-May-04/6:27 PM
Not bad, but for a country & Western song this should really be: I don't want you 'round here no more