| Re: Snowball by INTRANSIT |
capachijim 24.168.25.13 |
24-Apr-04/8:04 PM |
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| Re: Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig |
capachijim 24.168.25.13 |
24-Apr-04/8:05 PM |
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| Re: metahaiku by ex0teric |
capachijim 24.168.25.13 |
24-Apr-04/8:06 PM |
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| Re: The How To on Haikus by <Wankster> |
capachijim 24.168.25.13 |
24-Apr-04/8:07 PM |
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Not sure about the last one..."poem" one or two? Maybe it's the satire like everyone else said. If it is, I get it and it's funny.
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capachijim 24.168.25.13 |
24-Apr-04/8:09 PM |
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Nice, but don't get why its a "concrete" -10-
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| Re: Is it just a word by CHRMEcountryGRL |
capachijim 24.168.25.13 |
24-Apr-04/8:10 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
capachijim 24.168.25.13 |
24-Apr-04/8:13 PM |
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wow, this is excellent. Finally a concrete worthy of its name, thank god for that. Tis a 10!
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| Re: The Love Poem by William Delacroix |
capachijim 24.168.25.13 |
24-Apr-04/8:13 PM |
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| Re: He Hunts For Meaning by validus_vox |
Jeremi B. Handrinos 66.229.187.185 |
24-Apr-04/11:35 PM |
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Well, there goes my bladder.
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| Re: Writing the Books by validus_vox |
aliena 210.214.182.215 |
25-Apr-04/10:28 AM |
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| Re: To Be Happy by embersandenvelopes |
zodiac 67.240.155.133 |
25-Apr-04/6:47 AM |
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"My memories, reduced, don't reside at your distaste." - Do you have any idea what this means?
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zodiac 67.240.155.1 |
25-Apr-04/8:09 AM |
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It's a pretty intelligible poem; it just doesn't mean what you say it does. And the title doesn't fit.
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| Re: She Searches For Love by validus_vox |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
25-Apr-04/8:12 AM |
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I was going to give this a 7 until I read the comments and saw what it is about. For what it's worth, I think you should try the above suggestion and try rewriting it and trying to find the "right" words (I didn't get that it was a mentally ill girl until the comments). Still, it's not bad at all.
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| Re: Mental Escape by validus_vox |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
25-Apr-04/8:15 AM |
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Yes, some punctuation would definitely make this better.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215 |
25-Apr-04/9:26 AM |
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"Imperfection is where true beauty lies."
A perfect motto for the flaccid-minded, ' artistic' teenaged girl: vague and wishy-washy enough that no definite meaning can be assigned to it, even by the author, but so manifestly absurd that one can show each of the particular possible meanings to be utter buncombe. -10-
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| Re: To Be Happy by embersandenvelopes |
Blindpoetry 68.106.171.15 |
25-Apr-04/9:42 AM |
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I got that Don't worry, be happy song stuck in my head after reading this...
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Blindpoetry 68.106.171.15 |
25-Apr-04/9:46 AM |
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Very good.
Only thing I had a problem with was
'Let It Be' ... It just tickled my nerves a little. But thats just me. 0_o;
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
aliena 210.214.182.215 |
25-Apr-04/10:18 AM |
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I found myself singing this poem..
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| Re: evolution 9 by wilco |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
25-Apr-04/10:32 AM |
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looky, its a arrowhead.
What is this creature, and how did its description merit a ten from daveslady? Are you, by any chance, Dave?
I can give it a nine I guess, cuz well if its good enough for her...
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| Re: Exclamatory Abuse by Blindpoetry |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
25-Apr-04/10:43 AM |
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unusual texture, conveys well.
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