regarding some deleted poem...	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	20-Apr-04/2:03 AM
i like how the lines got shorter and shorter, but if you were going to lengthen the end lines it may carry more impact if only the last line is affected. other than that it was enjoyable, though not stellar.
Re: questions by ggawrysi	zodiac 67.240.192.133	20-Apr-04/4:19 AM
We know how: Professor Plum with the candlestick.
Re: #20 by mikejedw	zodiac 67.240.192.149	20-Apr-04/6:32 AM
I would beware that 1) your first line [perhaps unconsciously] sounds like Carl Sandburg's superfamoso "Fog", and 2) it doesn't make any sense to crawl on one's feet.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	20-Apr-04/6:43 AM
"stimulating his feet" - evocative.
Re: Sissy Faggot by Shardik	edpeterson 68.79.4.88	20-Apr-04/7:15 AM
unbelievable. It reads like a page of my diary. I can SOOOO relate to this. Kewl. my parents really never understood me neither. I hav not cut mysefl in 2 weeks, but its so hard.
Re: From Treehouse To Factory by Shardik	edpeterson 68.79.4.88	20-Apr-04/7:21 AM
not learned, earned.
Re: questions by ggawrysi	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	20-Apr-04/7:49 AM
is "How was it done?"
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	20-Apr-04/8:00 AM
Did the search, but being at work was afraid to click some links - is it gross? Will it be more gross than a pineal cyst? Cuz, so far that tips my scales at horrific.
Re: #20 by mikejedw	irishfolksuicide 81.178.206.187	20-Apr-04/9:24 AM
the, with, by, the, on. Five syllables gone saying nothing, that is a whole line.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.211.143	20-Apr-04/9:35 AM
berkley => berkeley.
Re: questions by ggawrysi	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	20-Apr-04/10:11 AM
Actually, I ask how things were done quite often.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.155.118	20-Apr-04/10:24 AM
I declare this the pimpliest sonnet ever. Thank you.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	20-Apr-04/10:41 AM
this is not iambic pentameter. sonnets never have the word "soft" okay, had to do that /joke mode off It's unusual for a sonnet to have a refrain line - and I like that. None of the rhymes feel forced, which is cool. Downside: the last line doesn't make sense to me. Its a strong line and alone it makes a nice finish - but how it fits in the context is lost on my small human brain. Still - a nine in my book.
Re: questions by ggawrysi	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	20-Apr-04/11:58 AM
the answer, btw, is always "with mirrors"
Re: #20 by mikejedw	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	20-Apr-04/12:07 PM
haiku shouldn't ryme, roundeye (nor should they really sound "poetic"). I'm serious, I didn't make this crap up. Change "feet" to "knees", and it will make more sense with "creeps" - unfortunately you are still stuck with the rhyme. dunno. have a 7
Re: reflection by xunitedx	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	20-Apr-04/12:10 PM
nice complex internal and end-rhymes. ballys - s/b "ballets"
Re: questions by ggawrysi	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	20-Apr-04/3:14 PM
this is one of the more confusing dialogues i've read lately...
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 68.237.255.80	20-Apr-04/3:19 PM
good job ripping off the title from a john mayer lryic.. "this might be a quarter life crisis" (why georgia)
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	20-Apr-04/4:15 PM
Some good sentiments here. You might want to fix this though..."like I’ll will never die."
Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	20-Apr-04/4:40 PM
kind of lame that someone (?) had to go to a bunch of computers at a computer station and "anonymously" vote 10 (check the IP addresses, they're all sharing a port). i feel obligated to give a zero as a balancing force.