Re: Dear Lord by simone_girard	Sasha 69.140.246.96	14-Apr-04/7:32 PM
Not a sonnet.
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 69.140.246.96	14-Apr-04/7:36 PM
Would you mind not recycling old poems by slightly editing them. It pushes the genuinely new creations off the "recent" list
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 69.140.246.96	14-Apr-04/7:37 PM
Would you mind not recycling old poems by slightly editing them. It pushes the genuinely new creations off the "recent" list
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 69.140.246.96	14-Apr-04/7:37 PM
Would you mind not recycling old poems by slightly editing them. It pushes the genuinely new creations off the "recent" list
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	14-Apr-04/7:38 PM
Dan, what have you done? Ahhhh - I get it. :O)
Re: The Idea of Fusion at the Beach (After Wallace Stevens) by coffeespoons	Dan garcia-Black 67.122.14.162	14-Apr-04/7:46 PM
"we sound like nothing but the wind" Great thought because that's our job-- to teach the wind to speak.
Re: Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	14-Apr-04/7:47 PM
LoL. Brilliant. Leets see, you don't have a nine yet...
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 69.140.246.96	14-Apr-04/7:54 PM
oh, and it's "más romantica que EN Ingles" you need the preposition in Spanish, even in comparisons
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	14-Apr-04/8:02 PM
Maybe we like this betterah?
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	14-Apr-04/8:08 PM
Dig it man.
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 69.140.246.96	14-Apr-04/7:51 PM
I must say, being a translator of poetry, a linguist, and a poet, that the idea of relative beauty of languages is a myth. It is obvious to me that this poem was written by a native english speaker translating english clichés into Spanish to make them sound fresh."te amo con todo mi corazón" for example certainly would not sound as good as the cliché "I love you with all my heart" from which it was translated. Also it should be "te conozco" not "conozco tigo."
Re: The Idea of Fusion at the Beach (After Wallace Stevens) by coffeespoons	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	14-Apr-04/8:17 PM
I'll grant you the ending is Stevensish - I'm reminded more of Thoreau with the rest. And there's not too much bad about that.
Re: Diptych by coffeespoons	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	14-Apr-04/8:23 PM
Help me understand why you consider this a Diptych. Please, I'm not being sarcastic.
Re: Diptych by coffeespoons	coffeespoons 66.251.24.170	14-Apr-04/8:28 PM
Oh. Diptych as it was two poems put together, and thought and action contrasted, in some ways. But mostly for the separate narratives...
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.155.18	14-Apr-04/8:32 PM
Not iambic pentameter. -0-
Re: Anthem of the Anachronists by coffeespoons	zodiac 67.240.155.18	14-Apr-04/8:44 PM
O What whimsickal Britishy talk! Makes me want to say DO and IS with special emphasis with all the other chaps in my level. It's too bad all the real Brits on this site talk like deranged EastEnders wot bin nipped cushty inna Norff an Souff wivva Lord Lovell. But then I found out you're not British, just American, and I gave you a -5-.
Re: A ballerina bubble bath by horus8	Sasha 69.140.246.96	14-Apr-04/9:20 PM
GOOD! One of the very few poems on PoemRanker that is actually worth reading! Shortening of the lines would make it more immediate in effect and impact
Re: Assassin Nation by Blue Magpie	Sasha 69.140.246.96	14-Apr-04/9:24 PM
the breath/death rhyme is cliché and expected (Other than shibboleth, seth, and elizabeth, there aren't any modern english words that rhyme with death/breath) rather Well executed though
Re: Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	Tara57 147.9.40.184	14-Apr-04/10:35 PM
Ah Foucalt...lovely...I do believe Dear I hold your words dear- Dear
Re: Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	14-Apr-04/11:00 PM
The answer is yes, er maybe, er . . ., ah forget it, have an 8.