| Re: Where are you, Sally Jesse Rafiel? by GregDeEgg |
zodiac 67.240.192.58 |
10-Apr-04/6:34 AM |
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For misspelling Raphael: -7-
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| Re: Three Bears by hotwire |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
9-Apr-04/10:03 PM |
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YEs, it is different but the grammatical errors to make it a little hard to read in places.
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| Re: On the Theme of Melted Pianos by embersandenvelopes |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
9-Apr-04/10:10 PM |
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I kind of like this.....very....abstract?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.151.136 |
10-Apr-04/1:47 AM |
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Hit. That seriously summed up my wish before bed every night, for almost a year. Seriously, beautiful beyond imagination, but you might want to fix that typo (5th Line Last Stanza), other than that absolutly touching.
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| Re: Three Bears by hotwire |
thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.151.136 |
10-Apr-04/1:55 AM |
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Good the of the Idea of comparing Teddy Bears, something comforting, to Men, without a doubt a odd territory. The execution is overly simplifed and a bit flailing to hold its self together but works out fairly well at the end. -8-
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| Re: My Pain 2004 by ToMuchPain04 |
thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.151.136 |
10-Apr-04/2:02 AM |
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Who Do You Think Your Kidding? You Call This A Free Verse? Pimple, Its Called A Pimple, And ITS TERRIBLE! There is no depth, nothing more than whining, and trying to rhyme. Learn about the art, before you stumble thru another rhyme session with boo-woo your host Bandaid Butter Fingers! -0-
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| Re: A Pen Named Ed by Enkidu |
thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.151.136 |
10-Apr-04/2:05 AM |
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Masterful, Good Meter, and it made me Giggle
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.151.136 |
10-Apr-04/2:09 AM |
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How very wise indeed, Thou Have shown us the way to our salvation, Praise be to Thee, oh Mighty Teacher -10-
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| Re: Jesus Rises from the Grove by wilco |
Joe-joe 68.194.47.34 |
10-Apr-04/4:24 AM |
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Jesus, liar or lunatic... a very old very played out story. Jesus the ficticious product of a band of religious fanatics seeking to break away from classic Jewish tradition.....a theory posed by securalists more than 400 years ago. Nothing original here just the usual obsession with Our Lord and Savior by those who claim to be non-believers...interesting, very interesting.
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| Re: Being by horus8 |
edpeterson 68.79.21.240 |
10-Apr-04/6:36 AM |
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hi horus8. pretty good one here. and one that i have not seen before, but contains a good dose of wisdom and a dash of bitterness. well done .
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Joe-joe 68.194.47.34 |
10-Apr-04/6:40 AM |
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I really enjoyed this. Nice work. -10-
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| Re: may 18 by Bill Z Bub |
edpeterson 68.79.21.240 |
10-Apr-04/7:24 AM |
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enigmatic, but fresh and a little dark.. . good poem though. wording is very fresh and appealing.
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| Re: Invasion by INTRANSIT |
edpeterson 68.79.21.240 |
10-Apr-04/7:27 AM |
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hahah, funny. Lingered toward the garage?? strange and, somewhat ineffectual word choice there. How does one linger toward something?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.11 |
10-Apr-04/9:13 AM |
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Hey, Shushin. Didn't mean to delete your comment. Thanks for the good input. I always seem to use too much to say too little. I'll work on it.
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| Re: Of Fortunes and The Future by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
10-Apr-04/9:51 AM |
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Please change "good" to "well," and "another's" to "your" if you wish to please me and let my words pour straight into you fears. Nice!
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| Re: Jesus Rises from the Grove by wilco |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
10-Apr-04/9:57 AM |
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I can read this as a slur on Christianity, or I can read it as another man's story, who happens to be named Jesus, or I can read it as an embodyment of who Jesus was in a present-day man, which is the way I like to read it. Nice.
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| Re: My Pain 2004 by ToMuchPain04 |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
10-Apr-04/10:00 AM |
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The last line is good. The rest is a play on rhymes, too many words for what it says.
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| Re: Liar by Babigurly69 |
anyone 172.163.179.37 |
10-Apr-04/2:16 PM |
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More like a top-40 song than a poem
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| Re: this feeling by gmoney8469 |
anyone 172.163.179.37 |
10-Apr-04/2:17 PM |
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| Re: Creation of all Things by KnightofMidkemia |
electroman1979 198.81.26.15 |
10-Apr-04/3:14 PM |
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the big bang theory is a theory, however, i beleive it to be false
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