Re: Beth by horus8	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	8-Apr-04/5:43 PM
I imagine some of the choppiness I read would be greatly smoothed by the singing of it. it works; sure.
Re: Wrath by niyama	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	8-Apr-04/6:58 PM
And I'm not either, clickety-click, but I will compain about the "squeaky edge" otherwise very good.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	8-Apr-04/7:00 PM
Hmmmm, strangely I do like this better....
Re: La théologie pour les Politiciens by wilco	wilco 24.176.102.131	8-Apr-04/7:15 PM
I can't believe I've gotten no "guffs" and no irate rants from Zodiac....feeling left out....
Re: Cabbagetown will miss you by tre	jsd 147.9.165.67	8-Apr-04/9:59 PM
oh my dear it is so long... I also think it can be cleaned up, possibly by making the lines more of a standard length... it's jumbly when there's one really long line followed by something so short... however, there is some good imagery and description going on... I think towards the end though all the particulars started to confuse me, I got a little lost up in them instead of the meaning behind the writing...
Re: ritual of now intensified by nentwined	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.86.113.159	9-Apr-04/5:43 AM
Could you tell me who is responsible for the following: "We want art for art's sake that will reflect the magazine's edgy, exciting attitude."
Re: Three Bears by hotwire	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	9-Apr-04/8:04 AM
different. points for that. I really don't mind the lowercase "i" as a tool themselves, but the capital usage with "I'll" kinda wrecks it.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	9-Apr-04/8:05 AM
better.
Re: J.F.K. by thing1	thing1 207.132.131.54	9-Apr-04/8:49 AM
FOR EVERYONE WHO DOESN'T UNDERSTAND THE SIMPLICITY OF POETRY HERE'S A LESSON. THIS IS ABOUT A LADY I SAW WHILE WAITING IN J.F.K. AIRPORT. IT'S A DESCRIPTIVE POEM NOTHING MORE NOTHING LESS. EVERYTHING DOESN'T HAVE TO BE DEEP AND MYSTERIOUS.
Re: Polyester Mustache by Bachus	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	9-Apr-04/10:11 AM
awesome.
Re: Polyester Mustache by Bachus	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	9-Apr-04/10:13 AM
"... a sled pulled by 10 square feet of rabid ferret" - I said awesome already, right?
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	9-Apr-04/10:30 AM
So would I! Sometimes the temptation's so great I forget why I do this. How do you vote for satire anyway? Have a 9.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	9-Apr-04/10:58 AM
"They" refering to ice crystals, come trickling to us as finally ocean. Then "They" are dasies. OK, I'm picky, but I really like the flow of this and the bittersweet of it.
Re: Three Bears by hotwire	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	9-Apr-04/11:14 AM
Yes, it's different and cute too. Check some grammar though: "hold them dear will thee" ?? "or when i'm feelin week" should be weak.
Re: The Gardens by operaghost	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	9-Apr-04/11:25 AM
Other than dirt between the toes of those above and those below, what is going on here?
Re: Loneliness, Grief, and Other Emotions by MacFrantic	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	9-Apr-04/12:06 PM
I think you are playing around with poets who speak constantly of sadness. I hope so! If I knew so, I would give a 10.
Re: answers by francis nor capule	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	9-Apr-04/12:21 PM
I like this one much better - less cliched. But it seems it is you, not he, who is proud when you say, how would you appreciate the things in life without me?" and "every love song without me would just be a song"
Re: if only i could tell by nolan	sliver 63.190.64.177	9-Apr-04/7:52 PM
It sounds as if you are living it, but it seems to be a dreary existance. I like the overall feel of this piece though. A well desaerved 8.
Re: Jesus Rises from the Grove by wilco	daveslady 140.211.124.224	9-Apr-04/9:55 PM
very visual, liked the twist at the end
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	9-Apr-04/10:00 PM
I dig this man. It's good.