regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.233.144	30-Mar-04/6:48 AM
Re-read it, second first verse transition is ok. Would prefer surface of (the) sky though.
Re: dying love by singinkygal	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.86.113.159	30-Mar-04/4:16 AM
A cursed clam packed with bile.
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.86.113.159	30-Mar-04/4:17 AM
A profoundly leaky guff in its own grease.
Re: Try, Please Try by Spindle	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.86.113.159	30-Mar-04/4:19 AM
A bulging king-sized foreskin swimming in dwarf discharge.
Re: Sitting in a damp refrigerator box, wondering (ODE) Basque by zodiac	SupremeDreamer 66.42.0.224	30-Mar-04/5:11 AM
Oh my.. indeed this is something I will cherish, a tonic of chuckles and depraved humor that feeds a weary & idle mind such as my own, causing it to vibrate in a universe-spliting surge of imaginative enjoyment... I do so love the wonders of a decent & dark parody. :) Blessed with ten.
Re: The Punk With The Stutter by Joe-joe	Caducus 195.92.168.163	30-Mar-04/5:14 AM
I lost my father recently at kensington, was he wearing a green wax jacket?
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	Caducus 195.92.168.163	30-Mar-04/5:15 AM
Hat tipped - great wordplay.
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	Caducus 195.92.168.163	30-Mar-04/5:15 AM
perfect end too
Re: Bread Wine And Chocolate by Caducus	SupremeDreamer 66.53.166.222	30-Mar-04/5:44 AM
I love this.. it fills me with an uncordial envy, and shame for not having come close to producing such a wicked & mighty haiku.. but worry not, I shall endure and soon enough my vile emotions will pass, beginning my mission to create a haiku to match yours, or atleast bring me closer to my "Golden Haiku from Satan". Blessed with ten.
Re: Darkness Falls On Tenement Twelve by Mona Lisa	SupremeDreamer 66.53.166.222	30-Mar-04/5:52 AM
Children have their innocence and purity for but a short while before the world arounds them feeds them the seed that sprouts their inner beast. I think you could compact this more and put more focus on the soul-searching, and less space travel. "The world orbits me here" That makes little or no sense since "orbit" generally means something around the lines of "to circle around an object after having been locked into that objects gravity.." Even if you can use orbit in the sense that you've used it in your poem, it still comes off as bad english to me. Blessed with seven.
Re: Darkness Falls On Tenement Twelve by Mona Lisa	richa 81.178.217.78	30-Mar-04/6:33 AM
First verse is very good, the rest falls apart a bit due to its reliance on abstractions, it also gets a bit self-absorbed.
Re: I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer	richa 81.178.217.78	30-Mar-04/6:39 AM
I rather like the refrain 'Where o where is my delusion of power/ that eludes me in this comic and dire hour' Bits about disease spreading seed are a bit old hat.
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 66.53.166.222	30-Mar-04/6:41 AM
Over-all, a mellow but interesting little story- well written, but it leaves me wondering a bit about its purpose (and yes, I'm aware thats a stupid thing to wonder about, but I reserve a pitiful right to express my essential human flaws like a hair-less baboon.) I'll read this over again in a while, I'm sure that I missed something or failed to notice or process intelligently the story in its entirety. You could sue me though. :) Blessed with eight.
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	richa 81.178.217.78	30-Mar-04/6:42 AM
Very well put together.
Re: A country called Cha by richa	zodiac 67.240.155.79	30-Mar-04/6:43 AM
I'm sorry, I don't get using beared instead of bore, or why it's called char in the poem and cha in the title (seems char is better for both). I'm sure you had a reason; I just can't see it. The rest is better than ever.
Re: A country called Cha by richa	SupremeDreamer 66.53.166.222	30-Mar-04/6:58 AM
In all honesty, this poem went beyond me leaky dome.. either its too abstract for me or it causes me to have a brain-fart, or I'm not applying my I.Q., therefor I shall refrain from voting.. perhaps you could explain it to me, most of your works I consider to be enjoyable mind benders, but every now and then I'm left feeling BENT.
Re: The Girl With the Tye-Dyed Hair by wilco	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	30-Mar-04/7:22 AM
A veritable lifetime of boil in the bag faeces.
Re: Try, Please Try by Spindle	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	30-Mar-04/7:25 AM
A fully ripened cadaver's glans.
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	francis nor capule 210.23.227.51	30-Mar-04/7:58 AM
very moving
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.233.44	30-Mar-04/10:28 AM
Is this about communication?