regarding some deleted poem...	Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.130.214.180	21-Mar-04/12:52 PM
Oh I see, it's a loose metaphor for you.
Re: Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 194.222.223.239	21-Mar-04/3:43 PM
I'm sorry I was mean to you before. I guess we're pretty similar really. I've been cutting myself for three years how about you? I guess I like the feeling of power it gives me. I only wish others could see the pain inside. That's why I like poemranker people really understand here. Tell us your heart. xx
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 194.222.223.239	21-Mar-04/3:46 PM
Cotton bow'ls.
Re: Beah Richards by Jeremi B. Handrinos	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 194.222.223.239	21-Mar-04/3:53 PM
Well done Jeremi! Your poetry is really coming along now.
Re: A Permanent Fixture by wilco	some deleted user 68.169.177.107	21-Mar-04/4:25 PM
The whole affair seem pretty much like this sometimes. Good rhythm. You put the feeling accross; that's what I like.
Re: Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK	some deleted user 68.169.177.107	21-Mar-04/4:26 PM
A bit melodramatic, but I can feel it.
Re: Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK	wilco 24.176.102.131	21-Mar-04/4:36 PM
I sincerely hope that you're not really cutting yourself....but if you are then I would like to make the suggestion (perhaps unwanted) that you see your doctor about getting some antidepressants that ARE yours. I did like your poem though, by the way.
Re: A Permanent Fixture by wilco	zodiac 67.240.155.124	21-Mar-04/5:38 PM
I'll give this a 10 if you send me a tape recording of yourself reading it in a deep wizardy voice.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 68.169.177.107	21-Mar-04/6:49 PM
Isn't oleander poisonous? I don't know the New Hampshire flora, but like the feel and flow of this. If only I knew what it means.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.211.81	21-Mar-04/7:12 PM
I don't get _sheer_ adornments, but that's my only word-choice problem (though I'd love to see someone call oleander what it is for once: rhododendron.) I too have only the vaguest idea what it's about - some kind of forest spirit, I'd guess.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.211.81	21-Mar-04/7:15 PM
"The best art clothes the truth," is a little twitchy. I'd at least reword it with clothes as a noun/metaphor/whatever.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	21-Mar-04/7:44 PM
I like the thought behind this - I'm going to suggest a word change - and its pretty ironic too, considering what I just posted (and zodiacs love of it) - funny thing is I would suggest the same regardless of what I posted.. anyway... consider changing "clothes" to "adorns" - both for the word choice and also for the aliteration. I like "imagining" there.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 68.169.177.107	21-Mar-04/8:12 PM
Thank you both, but neither "clothes" nor "adorns" seems right anymore for what art should do for truth or clothes for a woman. Maybe "decorate."
Re: Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK	poemwanker 212.219.142.161	22-Mar-04/7:49 AM
I'm sizzling as I get busy. Sitting on the hob is the chip pan O! Why did I seat My flammable rear At such an inopportune time? -7-
Re: Poetry in action by Bobjim	poemwanker 212.219.142.161	22-Mar-04/7:53 AM
You know, alcohol works just as well. There lives near the home of this dude A girl who I've never seen nude Her dress sense is blessed But I wish she'd wear less Right, fuck this, I'm off for some food Cheerio old boy
Re: Depression by terbenaw	poemwanker 212.219.142.161	22-Mar-04/7:56 AM
Consider the lily. Invigorated spandangled horsemonkey
regarding some deleted poem...	poemwanker 212.219.142.161	22-Mar-04/7:58 AM
Although every man shall be measured by the length of his rod, I cannot help but feel that frolics on a summer's day would be qualified better with a hint of Spain.
Re: be yourself by PhSbLoNdE569	poemwanker 212.219.142.161	22-Mar-04/8:03 AM
What if 'yourself' is a Hitler-esque dictator, convinced that the Jews should be killed? Oh go on. -5-
Re: Senseless Murder by Sapphire2589	poemwanker 212.219.142.161	22-Mar-04/8:09 AM
10.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 152.30.11.217	22-Mar-04/8:34 AM
The only part of this which isn't sublime is "we are no more in the fields / that raised bohemia..." I think it's just too loud and heavy for such a whispered poem. Sounds like something you'd have to say in John Kerry's voice. "One must at least / build the wall they splash / with plaster" is great - a small voice.