regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	3-Mar-04/6:20 AM
WTF mo fo? Rock over London Rock on Chicago Shell. It's the world's best selling gasoline.
regarding some deleted poem...	meektiger15 216.109.10.61	3-Mar-04/6:21 AM
oohhh I love this o.O its so cool dude..haha..O.o
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	3-Mar-04/6:23 AM
I hope I'm not being presumptious, but I thought you might like a little help with a re-write. Swing-set; buttercups survive; at the edge; of those; dirty scars; she too; thrived beautifully; in; the shadow; of obliteration. There is something; to be said; for borrowed time - the flower; has no knowledge of; footfalls, except for perhaps; the; last one. In the; years before; first grade; she already had so many dreams - an apron-full; by the time she was four. She would; whisper small; songs to them, cradling them, yet; skipping – never considering they might tumble; out. And when; they did; in the; first week of; her fifth year she never spoke; of dreams; again. What happened; is not important, so much as it did not; kill her, nor; really, did it often make; her; wish it had. She’s learned to live; in the unlikely places, in the cracks within stone; where; she has; what she needs. Just; enough soil; to call home, a little rain to quench; her thirsts, sun so; the; shadows may follow - and; lots; of; time.
regarding some deleted poem...	meektiger15 216.109.10.61	3-Mar-04/6:28 AM
Dude im speechless.... I love your work! O.o
Re: Sages by meektiger15	meektiger15 216.109.10.61	3-Mar-04/6:43 AM
Okay yeah this poem sucks because I had nothing to write about and I was bored and couldn't think of anything so I just typed stuff down..hahaha yeah well anyways...... <:3 )~~~L8er~~~~( 3:>
Re: Sages by meektiger15	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	3-Mar-04/6:46 AM
I suggest you capitalise the rhyming words - like this: The war begins with the SAGES They want the world to end, stealing peasants souls and making WAGES They never have any CARE About the peasants, war or even their family: all they do is stay in their LAIR They have the key but they do not use IT It could save the SHIT They got bored and killed everyone in their PATH They had no sympathy for all those who got in their way suffored their WRATH They couldnt see they began the WAR And made it come to an end; they just took their LORE And have never been seen AGAIN Because they are all INSANE and snort COCAINE and COMPLAIN about headaches in the BRAIN caused by a ruptured internal cerebral VEIN
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	3-Mar-04/6:49 AM
Yo mo fo RAWKMAGE SUCKS A MALE CAMEL'S SHITTY ASS Rock over London Rock on Chicago Sprint. Be there now.
Re: Lunacy by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	3-Mar-04/6:50 AM
Hey guys! Crytsal Lane Swift here! I think this poem's like totally awesome and I give it -10-
Re: Cutters Part II The Recut (Limerick Triplet) by Shardik	Bobjim 212.135.1.80	3-Mar-04/7:19 AM
If you're going to do bad poetry, do it properly. Still, a 7 for trying.
Re: Lunacy by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	Bobjim 212.135.1.50	3-Mar-04/7:23 AM
I like this one. I feel it could almost apply to me. 10
Re: Timmy by richa	fair12 66.84.225.2	3-Mar-04/9:38 AM
A very haunting quality. I thought the last line should have just a bit more - but that's just me. Excellent read otherwise.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 66.167.126.86	3-Mar-04/11:35 AM
Fantastic!
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 66.167.126.86	3-Mar-04/11:36 AM
Very nice!
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 66.167.126.86	3-Mar-04/11:38 AM
In fact, better than nice. You have shown genius here.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 66.167.126.86	3-Mar-04/12:02 PM
pretty heavy grief
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 66.167.126.86	3-Mar-04/12:06 PM
good melencholy
Re: Sages by meektiger15	zodiac 152.30.60.196	3-Mar-04/12:45 PM
**w'ls
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 152.30.60.196	3-Mar-04/12:47 PM
"another wounded traveler beginning / their five hour stay" is very incorrect grammar. See if you can guess how.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 194.222.223.239	3-Mar-04/1:55 PM
What a load of podsols.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 152.30.60.196	3-Mar-04/2:24 PM
The first stanza is fine. Good, even. The second is rubbish, though. I'd drop it.