Re: paint me a poem (try 2) by nentwined	etherealmaiden 66.71.73.78	2-Mar-04/12:06 PM
coolies.
Re: Eat It While It's Hot by Shardik	Shardik 24.130.214.180	2-Mar-04/1:19 PM
And Gore Vidal.
Re: Uncle Sam Is Dead by Lenore	Shardik 24.130.214.180	2-Mar-04/1:21 PM
Christ, by the end...? I was still a communist. My suggestion, keep the last stanza and eat the rest.
regarding some deleted poem...	plinkyponk 62.254.64.7	2-Mar-04/1:36 PM
sardonic sarcastic cynical cyanide words
Re: paint me a poem (try 2) by nentwined	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	2-Mar-04/2:15 PM
What do you mean by 'deep'?
Re: Cutters Part II The Recut (Limerick Triplet) by Shardik	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	2-Mar-04/2:28 PM
Well, at least you tried.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	2-Mar-04/6:01 PM
Not feelin this one. sorry.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 152.18.33.197	2-Mar-04/6:02 PM
Two appropriate uses of semicolons. -10- and -10-.
Re: Uncle Sam Is Dead by Lenore	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	2-Mar-04/6:02 PM
Gawd. That's long. I know, you get that alot.
Re: Cutters Part II The Recut (Limerick Triplet) by Shardik	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	2-Mar-04/6:03 PM
"stepped upon a landmina." - okay, thats brilliant. The rest, gradually less so - but still a -10- if ever I saw one.
Re: I Remember Thinking by BrandonW	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	2-Mar-04/6:04 PM
excellent (period, full fucking stop).
Re: where to go by AskittlesK	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	2-Mar-04/6:06 PM
Immediately turned off by seein "Purple" and "hazey" together - but I'll keep reading... hmmm. I like the last two lines - but I still don't know what it was about.
Re: Pop the Pill by etherealmaiden	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	2-Mar-04/6:07 PM
Was liking it until "My reality's blurred " then it lost its charm.
Re: Pop the Pill by etherealmaiden	zodiac 152.18.33.197	2-Mar-04/6:15 PM
I don't think you really pop pills. Sorry. Now I'm asking myself, how would a real pill addict write this poem differently? And I'm thinking, probably by not writing at all. Or by not writing a poem about pill-popping. So, there are all sorts of tricky issues you could put in this poem - touching on, among other things, the authenticity of the authorial voice, the general Barthian meta-ness of writing a poem in which the narrator - obviously not a pill-popper - pretends to be one without really expecting to be believed (and is, for that reason, more believable.) That would really be something. Or you could just write about your own life instead.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	2-Mar-04/8:18 PM
I like this. Good job.
Re: Pop the Pill by etherealmaiden	wilco 24.176.102.131	2-Mar-04/8:21 PM
I think this is more about a feeling....wanting to take the drugs to kill the pain...not so much in actually doing it. Been there myself...I like it.
Re: where to go by AskittlesK	wilco 24.176.102.131	2-Mar-04/8:22 PM
This kind of makes me think that Hendrix and Jim Morrison got drunk together...
Re: Uncle Sam Is Dead by Lenore	wilco 24.176.102.131	2-Mar-04/8:26 PM
I like the ideas....but a little militant...
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-Mar-04/12:58 AM
May I say, without any unintentional equivication, that this is the shittest thing you have done. My three year old niece produces more thought provoking stools. Correspondence may not be entered in to, this is just plain shit.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-Mar-04/4:41 AM
CAPITAL, critter! Stoned obfuscation, Facial Fuzz, no cock.