| Re: Eternal Waiting by darkhelmet10 |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.87 |
10-Feb-04/4:08 AM |
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Eternal Wiping
Great wipes have little wipes
upon their stains to wipe 'em,
and little wipes have smaller wipes,
and so ad infinitum.
-from 'A Budget of Paradoxes' by A. de Morgan, 1872
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irishfolksuicide 81.178.255.225 |
10-Feb-04/4:13 AM |
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The nothing more nothing less parts are not needed I think. The reader should come to his own conclusion on the interplay between the two.
Other than that, really good, certainly one of the most polished I have seen.
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zodiac 67.240.211.140 |
10-Feb-04/6:55 AM |
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A poem cannot write themselves. Which is bad because you cannot write one yourselves. But why should we trouble myself? I'm sure it will resolve usselves. Goodbye, I'm going to hang yourself. It's too bad, too, because the poem's not bad (but not enough to save theirselves!) Come back when you've figured out the title and I might reconsider whoseself. Consider youselves lucky with a 5.
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
10-Feb-04/7:50 AM |
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Shucks. there ain't no anonimity anymore. Blue is same as green. Still this bleads a little.
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
10-Feb-04/7:55 AM |
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Yep. That is what a poet is 'supposed' to be. It is a rare dead when someone steps up to the plate.
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
10-Feb-04/8:04 AM |
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
10-Feb-04/8:13 AM |
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
10-Feb-04/8:21 AM |
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Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
10-Feb-04/8:38 AM |
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You need to put less crack on your eyes & more razors on your face.
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Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
10-Feb-04/8:44 AM |
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During. Specifically over the poems of crystalaneswift - check out her poems if you need some filth - and Katie - she was a real little tease.
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some deleted user 208.25.247.109 |
10-Feb-04/8:50 AM |
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Very truthful! i like it.
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zodiac 152.18.33.197 |
10-Feb-04/11:17 AM |
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You should get rid of the last line. It's utterly unnecessary.
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| Re: Lifes work by richa |
zodiac 152.18.33.197 |
10-Feb-04/11:20 AM |
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I don't like the repetition of again. Probably just my taste, though.
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| Re: Offence by Stephen Robins |
zodiac 152.18.33.197 |
10-Feb-04/11:24 AM |
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Is he eating cum out of his own bum? Is that possible?
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Shuushin 147.154.235.52 |
10-Feb-04/11:44 AM |
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"I loved her much"
a perfect opportunity to use a word I've been wanting to use all week "overmuch"
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richa 81.178.205.49 |
10-Feb-04/12:45 PM |
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If you were to get rid of the last line the 'burn as deeply' would have to be more precise so as to indicate the fire as destructive.
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| Re: Lifes work by richa |
Shuushin 147.154.235.52 |
10-Feb-04/1:02 PM |
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| Re: Broken bridge by That One |
That One 216.148.246.134 |
10-Feb-04/5:23 PM |
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is that a good or bad hmm?
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xxx 68.165.172.185 |
10-Feb-04/6:49 PM |
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Such luxury, this blatant hedonism!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
xxx 68.165.172.185 |
10-Feb-04/7:28 PM |
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L7...drugy cusion--- cousin?
Very good angst on angst.
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