Re: In love as in war by zodiac	annabellee 64.252.105.83	30-Jan-04/8:11 PM
I felt the thud- -Ing. 9
regarding some deleted poem...	annabellee 64.252.105.83	30-Jan-04/8:16 PM
on first glance I thought it read 'lousy river' Which I liked! Nice. 7
Re: How to sleep sitting up by Bachus	annabellee 64.252.105.83	30-Jan-04/8:51 PM
WOW! That's powerful stuff! 10 and that's the only 10 worth it I've seen so far.
Re: missin' you by clumseYdaiseY	sonawrote 152.163.252.72	30-Jan-04/8:53 PM
we've all been there once
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.155.173	30-Jan-04/8:59 PM
Unsurprisingly, you were ranked low by everyone this poem's about. By which I mean not me, since I'm giving you a 10.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.155.173	30-Jan-04/9:00 PM
Wrong. 4.
Re: You Know Not by broken_wing11	sonawrote 152.163.252.72	30-Jan-04/9:06 PM
I like it but feel after 2 readings that there is a small suggestion....add the word time after night in 8th line...flow would be smoother
Re: To Avalon by annabellee	zodiac 67.240.192.158	30-Jan-04/9:19 PM
"Forever beckoned beyond the mists. But lost, between the worlds adrift." - this is the weakest part. Fix that up. Some of the antiquated diction might stand to be toned down, even for what you're trying to do. 9.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.192.158	30-Jan-04/9:10 PM
You're getting it. I like 'the blood never lets.' Way to turn a phrase.
regarding some deleted poem...	Sam 203.160.161.10	30-Jan-04/9:31 PM
hell with those zeroes...this is a great, right-at-your-face and honest piece of poetry. No need for fancy word!
regarding some deleted poem...	Goad 217.226.29.223	31-Jan-04/3:55 AM
What made this pome interesting to me was the hint at the end that the poetry was beginning to become important in and of itself to the narrator. This aspect could be greatly enhanced by ending something along the lines of so I finished it and and banged her and then while she was smoking I had another look at it and saw where I needed to change a line.
Re: Covers by sonawrote	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Jan-04/3:56 AM
It's quite close to something good but it's kept back a bit, i think, by some of the rhymes and that last part where disguise is repeated - somehow gets difficult there. I'd say worth re-working a bit.
Re: To Avalon by annabellee	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Jan-04/3:59 AM
A good synthesis and gently embedded rhymes - but I can't decide if it's too long or too short...
Re: Drizzle by Sam	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Jan-04/4:04 AM
Actually, this is quite good for the most part. "Flood the land with gentle take over" is not. I can do without "forlornly" and "little" in this context. I think it's still deserving of a nine though - nice job.
regarding some deleted poem...	Goad 217.226.29.223	31-Jan-04/5:24 AM
Make sure you're aware that richa, zodiac & I aren't saying the pome is bad because it's about sadism. On the contrary -- for me at least -- the dynamic you (unwittingly?) describe in the first verses is nicely set forth (except maybe for S.3 L.2). It's just that the last word invalidates the whole thing. Change it to satisfaction, or pleasure, or even desire & it's an 8 or maybe a 9 for me.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.192.41	31-Jan-04/6:26 AM
Doesn't anyone else think this poem is silly, ironic, and bitingly satirical of practically everyone here?
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.87	31-Jan-04/8:13 AM
Ace! Sadly my poemes don't seem to have a similar effect. Can you imagine the look on a woman's face after watching a grown man humiliating himself in public, openly performing lewd acts before a disgusted crowd, laughing madly, and smearing himself violently against the cobbles? Well double that and you might begin to understand what happened during my rendition of "Wipe Before You Weep" at the Cambridge University Women's Embroidery Discussion Group. -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.165.172.185	31-Jan-04/8:16 AM
Not very good.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	31-Jan-04/8:25 AM
needing to make some changes....
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.165.172.185	31-Jan-04/8:32 AM
hmmmn