| Re: The Hermit by sykes |
god'swife 67.73.32.203 |
28-Jan-04/10:48 PM |
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You really need to catch up on your reading. This is old hat.
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| Re: Cold Rain Road by middenHeap |
Lenore 64.252.107.161 |
28-Jan-04/4:24 PM |
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The last line is as useless as tits on a nun. Otherwise I liked it. 7
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zodiac 152.30.60.178 |
28-Jan-04/3:12 PM |
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You're getting it. One part of this is making me think really hard. For that, a 9.
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penguin fiend 216.207.133.137 |
28-Jan-04/3:13 PM |
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My computer doesn't have spell-check
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
penguin fiend 216.207.133.137 |
28-Jan-04/3:15 PM |
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Poetry doesn't need punctuation, peotry has no rules, so how can you say she broke the non-existant rules of poetry?
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| Re: To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT |
AuntyM 152.163.252.72 |
28-Jan-04/4:09 PM |
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I concur. Well put, Goed.
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| Re: Last love poem by penguin fiend |
some deleted user 208.25.247.75 |
28-Jan-04/4:15 PM |
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This is great....i dont use punctuation...capitols, proper use of speech... or grammar either and everyone seems to hate me for it....and to me your stuff is great and i understand it...so keep doing it the way YOU like it theres no problem with it and everyone that has a problem with mis use of words and punctuatin should just kiss our no exclamation asses
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Lenore 64.252.107.161 |
28-Jan-04/4:18 PM |
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I hate those sick bastards! 7
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zodiac 152.30.60.178 |
28-Jan-04/4:53 PM |
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"A Murder of Crows" is already a Cuba Gooding Jr. movie, but then you knew that. This would be a lot stronger (that's all I'm saying) if you thought of something else for that line.
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| Re: Blood on the Sidewalk by Red Optimist |
Miggy 208.59.134.37 |
28-Jan-04/5:47 PM |
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| Re: Tragic Love by WithoutLife |
some deleted user 208.28.223.38 |
28-Jan-04/6:18 PM |
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i really love this poem...very good
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| Re: Fake Happiness by WithoutLife |
some deleted user 208.28.223.38 |
28-Jan-04/6:20 PM |
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love it your really good....i wish i was this good.... anyway, i gave you a big fat 9.
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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
28-Jan-04/8:09 PM |
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need to fix a few things.
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| Re: Are You O.K.? by sonawrote |
sonawrote 172.133.219.82 |
28-Jan-04/8:27 PM |
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then in that case I was ahead of myself....it was written when I was 14 in Chem class.....board meetings were 10 years away.....
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Sam 203.160.161.10 |
28-Jan-04/9:16 PM |
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Too short did't quite catch the drift.
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| Re: See the Sun Overhead and Believe by phbiscuit |
Sam 203.160.161.10 |
28-Jan-04/9:26 PM |
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This is great, i can see the symbolism and the social relevance of the poem if we would dig deeper from it's content. It's true we're deaf, blind and dumb somehow living in this universe.
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| Re: Transmissional Dance by Red Optimist |
Sam 203.160.161.10 |
28-Jan-04/9:30 PM |
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The rhymes and the meters does'nt quite go smoothly.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
god'swife 67.73.32.203 |
28-Jan-04/10:31 PM |
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I too have a murder.
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=71752
much to her credit richa suggested a 'storytelling of crows' which i am adopting forthwith.
the title doesn't add even one iota. Hows about "Donner Party of None" (just kiddin') Who's tears? The crows' tears? They are the only inhabitants of your poem. you need more here.
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| Re: Tomorrow by sykes |
god'swife 67.73.32.203 |
28-Jan-04/10:45 PM |
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I will ransom them from the power of the grave; I will redeem them from death.
Where, O Death, are your plagues? Where O grave is your destruction?
Hosea 13:14
your intentions are the highest, but your poetry unfortunately is lacking. More righteousness, less prettiness. Go for the jugular. That's what Jesus did.
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| Re: Cold Rain Road by middenHeap |
god'swife 67.73.32.203 |
28-Jan-04/11:03 PM |
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