| Re: A Glass of Water by Princess_Snowflake |
zodiac 67.240.192.172 |
25-Jan-04/8:34 AM |
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And I felt good about the 10 you gave me, rockmage, until I started counting all the 10s you've given other people recently. What do you do when a poem is not say-nothing fluff like this? Do you have an 11 in reserve?
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| Re: The Upside-Down Frown by fevriere |
zodiac 67.240.192.172 |
25-Jan-04/8:38 AM |
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You win the coveted 'Golden Spiral-bound Notebook' for the day if CLS/Lydia-Evelyn and Princess Snowflake don't post. It comes with a purple wobble pen.
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| Re: A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus |
zodiac 67.240.192.172 |
25-Jan-04/8:45 AM |
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The title needs changing. Possibly just to 'The Blossom Tree'? Just a suggestion. Notice I'm still giving you a ten.
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unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/9:42 AM |
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As of now, i change my poem to a free verse.
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| Re: the small drop by richa |
Goad 217.82.11.166 |
25-Jan-04/10:08 AM |
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I agree with zodiac except I don't mind "they were a sunlight". It made me pause and consider the last line more deeply. If you want to demarcate "Water" set it off with a colon or by giving it its own line.
Hmm, just a thought, what about "disguising themselves as sunlight" or posing as sunlight, or something along those lines?
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unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/10:18 AM |
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This goes in the hall of shame! Its one of the worst poems EVER! HAHA oh well! :)
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unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/10:34 AM |
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BTW, this has nothing to do with my poem, but please do a search on your computer for Henry Vaugn or someting like Vaughn and read the 1st part of his poem "The World". BTW Mr. Vaughn is an old poet. Tell me what you think! Thanks!
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unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/10:37 AM |
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This one is kinda...why did you write it? (What was your "inspiration"?)
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| Re: Martyrs in suburbia - (we wander like breezes) by zodiac |
Goad 217.82.11.166 |
25-Jan-04/10:37 AM |
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MOST enjoyable. Is "I'll be the seed that's threshed in that fiery immortal catechesis" a metaphor for posting on pomeranker? That line's the only one that bugs me, because I'm not really sure what you mean by the fiery immortal catechesis.
st.2 l.4 I think it should it be I look across TO where or I look across the aisle and see or something. In any case, what you look across isn't what you're looking at. How's THAT for a nitpick, lol.
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| Re: the small drop by richa |
unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/10:42 AM |
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Loved it. Made me think. Its one of those poems that makes you read it again.
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| Re: Martyrs in suburbia - (we wander like breezes) by zodiac |
unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/10:46 AM |
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I liked it. Im no proffesional critic or poet. but i liked it.
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| Re: P.M.S. by Princess_Snowflake |
unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/10:49 AM |
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Interesting. Just a suggestion, when you get PMS, do something fun, instead of something that makes you realize how horrible you feel. Good Job, though.
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unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/10:52 AM |
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Why do i not see any 4 or 0's? This poem sucks!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/11:06 AM |
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unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/11:10 AM |
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I have a ? for all you. How exactly do you rank aa poem? Is it by how much you like it or by how good it is?
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| Re: A Glass of Water by Princess_Snowflake |
unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/11:14 AM |
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LIked it. You must like water. I prefer pop or beer or chocolate milk or somethin. BTW, rockmage, do give everything a 10? Just wondering. Good job. ill say...7.
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| Re: Once the moon turned me into a hairy vagina by horus8 |
unouluvme 209.110.216.72 |
25-Jan-04/11:16 AM |
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Huh. Well...ill give it a five. Good, could be better, but good.
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| Re: Oh No! by foothangingoutofass |
broken_wing11 24.242.46.211 |
25-Jan-04/11:48 AM |
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Princess_Snowflake 206.166.118.210 |
25-Jan-04/12:44 PM |
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You wrote a good one. It describes all about teen-dating and break-ups. Way2Go!
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Princess_Snowflake 206.166.118.210 |
25-Jan-04/12:47 PM |
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Bravo! Bravo! You're so good at this. :-)
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