regarding some deleted poem...	Goad 217.82.13.226	24-Jan-04/3:52 PM
I couldn't figure out what the hell Palestinian had to do anything, so I googled and found a news article with the same date as this pome about the opening of the first Palestinian shopping mall and supermarket. Is that the sum total of the reference, or is there more to it? Please explain, I feel so ignorant. In any case, well done.
Re: The Grandfather Suite by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	24-Jan-04/4:01 PM
Dear Goad & tomcheese, Your conversation was becoming dangerously wacky, so I had nuke it from orbit. It's the only way to be sure.
Re: Grieving by d35	some deleted user 24.48.207.18	24-Jan-04/4:44 PM
nice, but maybe something happy next time
Re: A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus	Goad 217.82.13.226	24-Jan-04/4:57 PM
Wow. Wonderful. So well-crafted. Beautiful images. I loved your father's head "bowing like a cumbersome tulip" as he mowed. What a wonderfully apt image. It's been a long long time since I read narnia so I had to google for Mr Tumnus, but then it became even more poignant. This is so excellent you will obviously be taking it other places than pomeranker--do you want comments? I'll plunge ahead: There are a couple tiny edits needed: in st. 2 blossoms needs an s; in st. 3 incense is misspelled; and in st. 4 should it be "and HE met my Mother there"? In st. 2 the second use of Mum seems awkward, mightn't it be better to use mother? "His solace was the hills" bothers me slightly. Normally, solace would be found in the hills. "solace was found in" is a clichéd phrase you probably want to avoid, but maybe you might consider something like "His solace was in the hills/And he found my mother there too" (I dunno that that's better) and maybe one more line to indicate why she was in the hills that day??? "loving words" at the end of st. 3 seems a little weak & generic in comparison to the rest. No idea at all how to fix that since I'm not entirely sure what you mean by his father's wrath remaining in his loving words. I can think of lots of ways for that to be so, but I'd like to know which one you mean. SO good...
regarding some deleted poem...	unouluvme 209.110.218.136	24-Jan-04/5:55 PM
BTW, its one of my worst poems.
Re: A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus	unouluvme 209.110.218.136	24-Jan-04/5:57 PM
Really nice poem!
regarding some deleted poem...	unouluvme 209.110.218.136	24-Jan-04/5:59 PM
Weird, but in a good way!
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.165.172.185	24-Jan-04/6:17 PM
Okay! But does it actually work?
regarding some deleted poem...	unouluvme 209.110.218.136	24-Jan-04/6:33 PM
What do you mean??? Does it work in what way?
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/7:54 PM
Touch my warm quiff!
Re: World policy by penguin fiend	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/8:03 PM
Universal genius.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/8:04 PM
This stands with Byron and Bunion.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/8:08 PM
Touch my sopping crotch!
Re: Lullaby by Goad	Caducus 195.92.168.167	25-Jan-04/3:11 AM
Liked the way you vividly illustrate a poem. The part about the pigs ear was excellent. This to me came alive and kicking from S2. The opening 3 lines didn't grab me and I'm barren as to why. The ending lingered in my thoughts and a very well crafted poem - but hey what the hell do i know? 9
Re: P.M.S. by Princess_Snowflake	zodiac 67.240.155.196	25-Jan-04/4:32 AM
I can't believe you reposted this.
Re: the small drop by richa	richa 81.178.236.37	25-Jan-04/5:34 AM
a reworking of the loved child : http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp;jsessionid=az39OjE0y599?id=71142
Re: World policy by penguin fiend	richa 81.178.236.37	25-Jan-04/5:35 AM
Give your computer a rhyming dictionary and you are redundant with this poem.
Re: A Glass of Water by Princess_Snowflake	Goad 217.82.11.166	25-Jan-04/6:18 AM
A glass of water's the bestest drug So 9 or 10 per day I chug But I get more leverage From the beverage If I leave some ergot growing in the jug.
Re: the small drop by richa	zodiac 67.240.192.172	25-Jan-04/8:28 AM
Good as always. Comments: 1.) the comma after 'water' shouldn't be there. Maybe you could put a line break there instead. 2.) there should be some kind of punctuation after the end of the first stanza 3.) 'a sunlight' is weird when just 'they were sunlight' would be just as good. You get a nine because, though it's not perfect, it's better than all the crap getting unwarranted 9s and 10s on this site.
Re: A Glass of Water by Princess_Snowflake	zodiac 67.240.192.172	25-Jan-04/8:31 AM
This is not a limerick.