Re: dreamer by timvick473662003	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/1:30 PM
May I also pray with "What is really real my own reality?" ?
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/1:36 PM
thoughtful folk singer an earnest bowlful of face spooning the muses
regarding some deleted poem...	unouluvme 66.167.71.91	24-Jan-04/1:59 PM
I really liked your poem!
regarding some deleted poem...	unouluvme 66.167.71.91	24-Jan-04/2:03 PM
andrewjtomas- do you consider your poems to be above "elementary'?
Re: Lonely Tears by broken_wing11	unouluvme 66.167.71.91	24-Jan-04/2:07 PM
Hey, your here too??? cool! anyway, like i said before...love your poem!
regarding some deleted poem...	unouluvme 66.167.71.91	24-Jan-04/2:13 PM
interestin enough...humf....makes me laugh for some reason. spose it is worth a 9?
regarding some deleted poem...	middenHeap 217.82.13.226	24-Jan-04/2:17 PM
What? somebody dropped an expensive vase? Melinda's 2 month-old baby puked on the bible during christening? The split second in time while the gangbangers bullet is penetrating your brain? WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT???????????
Re: Lonely Tears by broken_wing11	middenHeap 217.82.13.226	24-Jan-04/2:29 PM
omigod this is the best pome I've read on this site since I came here. I spewed bavarian beer and veggie weiners all over my keyboard. Omigod, my gut hurts. I can't breathe. Whew.
Re: Some Thoughts Spilled - A Dreamers Cranial Chatter by Don-Quixote	unouluvme 66.167.71.91	24-Jan-04/2:29 PM
This has nothing to do with the poem (sorry), but check out the poem "THe World" by HEnry Vaughan. Hes a old one. Tell me what you think by replying here or at one of my poems!
regarding some deleted poem...	Goad 217.82.13.226	24-Jan-04/2:32 PM
I kinda liked this. You need a double entendre for the title.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.165.172.185	24-Jan-04/2:39 PM
L5...A gasp sp quiet... sp---so? And then again I see the whole stanza is skewed. Just to Jar?
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.165.172.185	24-Jan-04/2:41 PM
Again the deliberate Jar? World floating away on the 3 missing sylabals?
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/3:03 PM
I'm not that sex.
Re: Grieving by d35	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/3:23 PM
Je pense que vous avez signifié pour taper le "sol".
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	24-Jan-04/3:26 PM
Quel est le sens derrière un nom tel que Joe-Joe? Ce nom il, ce Joe-Joe, signifier n'importe quoi me? Si oui, et je rencontre un autre Joe-Joe, signifiera-t-il n'importe quoi plus?
regarding some deleted poem...	Goad 217.82.13.226	24-Jan-04/3:29 PM
mmm, nice whimsy. I like whimsy. I didn't read it as suicide contemplation at all, re: rockmage's comment; if you meant it that way please fuck off and find a hotline. Pretty please fix "before the tired river would soon cast me out"; it's not a permissible structure in English and thus is jarring. You could say "but" or "though" instead of before; I personally like: ------- BEGIN unsolicited edit -------- ...while the tired river hesitated to cast me out. Then perhaps I would.... ----- END unsolicited edit --------- because it contributes to the whimsicalishness. I like whimsy. Did I say that already? This is a purty whimsy.
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 195.92.168.178	24-Jan-04/3:47 PM
Original and sophisticated.
Re: To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT	Caducus 195.92.168.178	24-Jan-04/3:48 PM
Love the notions of being who we ARE and not what others want us to be. A real archers bowfinger to conformity.
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 195.92.168.178	24-Jan-04/3:50 PM
Never easy using numbers in a poem - you did well with this. The conclusion packs a punch
Re: Once the moon turned me into a hairy vagina by horus8	Caducus 195.92.168.178	24-Jan-04/3:51 PM
Sounds like the lost page of genesis. The 1st line grabs and so the 8th