Re: Dry Beast Night by fevriere	middenHeap 213.61.217.3	14-Jan-04/7:02 AM
Oh, well done! So that's what a sestina is. I'll have to have a go at one. Has it rhythmical requirements, or does it require only the reuse of the end words? strick should be stricken. I don't know what mistiful should be -- misted? mistful?
Re: The woods house by zodiac	richa 81.178.253.199	14-Jan-04/9:42 AM
A nice wandering story, grandmaster Dark angel may correct me on this but I think the line breaks are a bit off. Like the ending, probably the poems best line.
Re: Dry Beast Night by fevriere	richa 81.178.253.199	14-Jan-04/9:45 AM
Not dead keen on sestinas, this is good though. A couple of picks. 'salt moisture'? and 'growl for sleep'
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.253.199	14-Jan-04/9:57 AM
The flow of this is very good as always, and I like the three lines leading up to 'pure science'. Science a comment on the design of shoolboy weapons I guess (and pure being a pun on 'pure sciences').
Re: Stand by me by Cougarchic	richa 81.178.253.199	14-Jan-04/10:03 AM
A little too much silliness really. 'My state of mind is a real disgust'???!. I don't care if it does rhyme.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.46	14-Jan-04/10:07 AM
pure science indeed. miss you, btw.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.46	14-Jan-04/10:11 AM
Suspicion of who's making money on said plant and admiring the beauty of plant through the window of a greenhouse.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.126.112.80	14-Jan-04/1:42 PM
I'd drop the last line entirely, but you know me.
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	SupremeDreamer 204.31.168.199	13-Jan-04/11:36 AM
Where do you meet these shit-heads man? Honestly, hook me up, I need this kind of entertainment in excess, consistently. Can we market Billy Jesus as americas new at-home tap & constant IV drip? I predict it'll make a killing with jewish housewives. And amphetamine freaks with pens. Blessed with ten.
Re: O Endless Angst, Thou Stingeth Me by Goad	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	13-Jan-04/1:51 PM
"with the voices of owls" nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	titan69 62.31.28.21	13-Jan-04/2:01 PM
WOW WHAT A MIND`122£&&^^^
Re: The Man with the Fiberglass Head by MacFrantic	titan69 62.31.28.21	13-Jan-04/2:03 PM
Ilove this pome. brilliant10/10
Re: On the Discovery of Simple Sam and A Russian Catastrophe by MacFrantic	titan69 62.31.28.21	13-Jan-04/2:06 PM
is this binery. what?
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	titan69 62.31.28.21	13-Jan-04/2:15 PM
God you are such a fucking arsehole! I have never known anybody wright as much crap as you. How dose your big fat head fit through the door.
regarding some deleted poem...	Beseech 62.3.251.66	13-Jan-04/4:27 PM
I love the poem, I can really feel what the author is telling us. Where'd you get it from u s*** head. otherwise a gr8 poem
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	13-Jan-04/7:24 PM
nothing gold can stay... i think too much telling for such imagery - were it a story of some type; well maybe it is. dunno.
Re: Watching by DMonster	singinkygal 216.24.108.141	13-Jan-04/7:54 PM
Got Prozac? It is so depressing but I give it a 7.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 67.73.18.9	13-Jan-04/10:07 PM
OUR friendship. Try taking out as many little words as possible: 'Our friendship, like a maze Forever walking circles, walking backwards. Your voice, my get-away. Taking me from these places, Pulling me out of reality. Your breathes are my pathway, Leading me to peaces. Feelings put on hold, Pushed to the sides. And the rain drops to the ground A razor cutting through the pain. Great poem. No pretense.
regarding some deleted poem...	Cougarchic 198.81.26.47	13-Jan-04/11:38 PM
wonderful poem. so very true.
Re: 52 card pickup (only a test) by crwncka1	crwncka1 66.141.118.244	14-Jan-04/4:59 AM
yep i have reached a higher level of gayness here..... I have to admit...