Re: Migrating Storks by Blue Magpie	fevriere 62.254.128.6	12-Jan-04/2:13 PM
Simplistic but telling. I feel the part about the storks is slightly lacking, not really inforamtive. Perhaps relish whatever metaphor strikes you. Or perhaps keep it this way.
Re: Just A Dream by Blindpoetry	SupremeDreamer 204.31.161.193	12-Jan-04/2:24 PM
Whats wrong with you? Forgot to eat fish & chicken liver for breakfast? Strike one. Keep swinging the oakclub until you hit home or strikeout.
Re: The Blues by fevriere	SupremeDreamer 204.31.161.193	12-Jan-04/2:40 PM
Not bad.. seven.
Re: Snowflake by fevriere	SupremeDreamer 204.31.161.193	12-Jan-04/2:42 PM
Other than comparing her to a snowflake? the poem was pretty good. And it'll be better when you get rid of the snowflake, IMHO. eight.
Re: Just A Dream by Blindpoetry	Everyone 131.111.212.215	12-Jan-04/2:48 PM
Then why is there spunk all over the bedclothes?
Re: Just A Dream by Blindpoetry	Dark Angle 68.101.115.45	12-Jan-04/4:26 PM
things, brings, sings, strings, niiiice rhymes bro! ;p oh yeah, one and ton are sweet too!
Re: Just A Dream by Blindpoetry	Shardik 24.126.116.54	12-Jan-04/4:29 PM
Death defying.
Re: O Endless Angst, Thou Stingeth Me by Goad	Shardik 24.126.116.54	12-Jan-04/4:33 PM
lol, that was priceless. "what are you?" Dare the blank faced lizard ask?the end though was fucking grooving. "Who is it holds some part of me that I wake up missing?" Gackles. Perhaps tis the need for a new rug in the foyer?
Re: Passing of Wind by Goad	Shardik 24.126.116.54	12-Jan-04/4:38 PM
Homosexuallity is a sin, and you will go to Hell.
Re: Lynched by Bachus	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.46	12-Jan-04/5:48 PM
They say they-"aint skeered". they should be.
Re: Panda meat by horus8	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.46	12-Jan-04/5:53 PM
see? SEE? I'M HARMLESS COMPARED TO THAT GUY!!!! I ONLY HAUL CARS!!! ONLY 10 AT A TIME TOO!! THEY'RE NOT NEAR AS BAD AS THAT SCENARIO IS! YEAH!! harmless, I say.
Re: American Eden v.2 [revised] by SupremeDreamer	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.46	12-Jan-04/5:57 PM
Definitely a wee bit-o-passion in this one.
Re: Kenny G by Everyone	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.46	12-Jan-04/6:00 PM
and all this time I thought you were only a perverted school marm.10 for the boating thing.
Re: Spunkorpumpernipple by Shardik	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.46	12-Jan-04/6:10 PM
onewordwonderwoman.
Re: O Endless Angst, Thou Stingeth Me by Goad	TheWhiteLion777 64.235.184.53	12-Jan-04/7:40 PM
beautiful imagery…every word is in it’s place, every verse has a meaning…good job TheWhiteLion
Re: She Said by TheWhiteLion777	horus8 24.126.116.54	12-Jan-04/9:40 PM
That was a fine impression of a six headed wombat, but I was looking for an lemon lemur in pine scent?
Re: Victory smokes & black tiger ambrosia by Don-Quixote	Everyone 131.111.212.215	13-Jan-04/7:27 AM
You've broken your own record for concentrated self-indulgent guff. "Dirt road of loathing" sounds like the title of a Tool song. As does every single other line. Furthermore: 1. Vinegar isn't bitter. 2. "Fangs kiss bloody flesh" could only be made worse by hiring a tramp to hump the reader's leg while they read it. 3. The reason nobody says "fervid" outside of adolescent poetry and the 18th century is because it's a ridiculous word with no merit. 4. The whole thing is totally incoherent. It's just one random, self-congratulatory image after another. There's nothing to interest a reader. 5. Nobody except furries and hobos "growl in 'victory'. 6. Anybody who claims to be "groovin to the blue-collar blues" isn't. 7. You're a grotesquely ugly freak. Thanks. 10!!!!!!!
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 204.31.160.156	12-Jan-04/1:14 PM
enthropy = entropy, right? and theres other things that need fixing all over the place. Its a damn good first draft- a little editing and you'll be on Groove St. smokin on victory. Blessed with eight.
Re: Sympathetic Guilt by middenHeap	fevriere 62.254.128.6	12-Jan-04/2:06 PM
Intelligent. No con crit. Sorry.
Re: van Gogh's Irises by lastobelus	fevriere 62.254.128.6	12-Jan-04/2:09 PM
Painfulyl evocative. Plus it sounds like it's published.