Re: The Sunnyside of David Uden by lukehanney	pete 62.56.114.137	7-May-07/4:50 PM
clunky
Re: The Editor by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 121.247.152.123	9-May-07/10:05 AM
Good imagery D. Happy to read one of your poems after a long time. Sorry for the negligence. Hope you are having a whale of a time on the road. Praying for your safety.
Re: Worn Ruse by drnick	amanda_dcosta 121.247.152.123	9-May-07/10:10 AM
Bravo. Some psychological problem from how I see it and very well put. I like the phrase... Logic signs pass him by. You could do with an edit , but I think from one point of view, you've already made your point. Good work.
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 76.172.249.205	9-May-07/1:51 PM
Perfect. They are all the same arent they?
Re: Fraser Allonby Quidnam Cruris by Stephen Robins	Dovina 24.38.49.2	10-May-07/12:55 PM
There once was a blob named Dovina, Christ, you'd have wept had you seen her, All of that weight, Squeeze into four feet and eight, She had the combined mass of Bosnia and Herzegovina. Pedaling west, halfway across Virginia tomorrow I'll crest the Appalachians just 3500 miles to go can you imagine the ruts in pavement? Where's Fraser? Haven't seen him all day.
Re: Snow by MacFrantic	Dovina 24.38.49.2	10-May-07/12:57 PM
The first four lines portend a good poem, but the rest only continues to portend, never getting to the snow
Re: The Wingman by John Rambo	Dovina 24.38.49.2	10-May-07/1:00 PM
That isn't why. It's what you can get.
Re: The boomerang holiday by INTRANSIT	Dovina 24.38.49.2	10-May-07/1:05 PM
It's aged and antique compared to your style, but has a nice ring and a good point. those "who" think us . . . "fallest greenest" is just silly
Re: Altitude by half.italian	Dovina 24.38.49.2	10-May-07/1:09 PM
Can't see the point of this.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.38.49.2	10-May-07/1:16 PM
The title's cute and clever. And the bird is hero, cannonballs like birdshot. Line 4: "of the sky"
Re: Final Moon by Caducus	Dovina 24.38.49.2	10-May-07/1:27 PM
Really like; "My eyes, slave wet, journeyed through yours." Been there, done that; and that's what makes a poem. Do you mean "voile"?
regarding some deleted poem...	jessicazee 24.160.240.223	10-May-07/11:35 PM
Is this about me? Because I thought I told you not to tell anyone about the "ass to face" thing.
Re: The Editor by Dovina	jessicazee 24.160.240.223	10-May-07/11:37 PM
drop everything except for the fruit stuff. LOVE: "their bent and pretty form."
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	11-May-07/7:22 AM
interesting approach, but no go
regarding some deleted poem...	nypoet22 65.8.0.18	13-May-07/9:05 AM
too true.
regarding some deleted poem...	nypoet22 65.8.0.18	13-May-07/9:07 AM
last line needs work.
regarding some deleted poem...	nypoet22 65.8.0.18	13-May-07/9:24 AM
limp got it right. middle line is from department of redundancy department. first and last are great
regarding some deleted poem...	nypoet22 65.8.0.18	13-May-07/9:26 AM
that's why we love 'em
regarding some deleted poem...	nypoet22 65.8.0.18	13-May-07/9:28 AM
a poem that describes itself, except for the no purpose part...
Re: garden spite by skaskowski	Dovina 24.75.174.198	16-May-07/4:08 AM
Start with "I rip down the gate . . ." But for what reason you want to do this I can't see.