Thank you for the good votes, whoever else you may be, as for the zeros? Is this really that bad? I would think a petrarchan alone would be worth a five - trying not to be too disapointed.

this i fucking great, here is a 10 without the zero:o)

pebbles inside out... hmmm, a fresh concept. Songbirds as singing, falling stones - it sounds pretty, but I know its sinister. The repetition of light in the last stanza is unflattering. you have an opportunity for a good twist; you should take it. -7-

Oki- lets play the seesaw! 10!

"liquescent" - nice, also: "non compos mentis eye" I like this - I would like it more without the half sentence after the last comma. -8-

Hey - this is really pretty good. I'm thinking the rhyming might take away from the seriousness of it, but as it is - it works. How about another version without rhyme? But keep this one too. -8-

hart should/be heart to s/b too pocked s/b poked less telling, more showing -5-

"wow, this is long" But I didn't even read it after the premise. -no vote-

Hot air to you too!

A nice conceptual run! and your first 'haiku'; good job. Too bad we don't have another classification for 5/7/5 poems. try these as cinquain (2/4/6/8/2) -7-

Richa I like this one alot better. The linebreaks are a bit distracting though, but if I read it and make my own - it's a winner. having said that, that last prep phrase, what's it doing there. I think its a blemish on an otherwise pretty face. -8-

Let me guess, you must be the old man's whore, and you, I assume, think your poetry should be on the best list too. You two are hopeless, really.

Say Cheese!

VEry dense. Too dense imho. A few real gems in there and I would have stuck with it if there was some satisfying payoff at the end (pretty much anything except a hand kissed goodnight). Prolly five really good poems in there. dig them out. -7-

I don't hate it. It's got a fresh format too. I almost hate the last part, but the others are so good I'm willing to live with it. and if the "love" in the title has anything to do with tennis scorings, I will re-visit this with a ONE. -8-

Hmmmm. stinky, and I'm annoyed at the waste of the precious posting space (not being blessed with multiple user names - and I'm not saying you are either, and besides, it's perfectly legal). -5- cuz it's the closest thing to a real haiku anyone has posted here in a while (at least it's about nature).

i no comprenday "lips which life my down" I like how you say "you define in a single kiss The inexpressible" De-lark the last three lines, and remove the word love once and the whole thing will be better for it. -7- prolly a good deal higher without the first crit.

I certainly hope not. This sounds like the fatmansinging.

"occurrence" as it is used is a missed opportunity, methinks. Why were they welcome? (sarcasm aside) Other than that, pretty frickin' solid. -9-

semicolon here? Why? twine on its own line maybe instead? besides that, its a pretty vivid image - wondering what to do with it now that its in my head (you have my attention; wanting more). -7- for making me hungry.