quite a week. yep, quite a week.

Wow - a seven syllable word! and yes, truth is a many sided coin - the concept would work if it wasn't for language.

Get a life will ya

Hello Butch:o) seems ur tongue must be tied & the pen taken, if u insist in writing as such:o)

An where might this party be? Another crpytic thingy that I do not understand.

an epiphimal transformation, and I don't agree that it feels forced. The cadence is flawless and that should erase any perceived awkwardness. Granted, the perspective is a bit... whats the word? 'Commanding'? 'Pretentious' is too strong - whatever; it works fine to my ear. Rock on.

Liked the beginning, great stuff. Should have kept the initial happy note all the way through. Have you tried making love to geese as a method of cheering yourself up. ...7...

any good? Worth running with, I was thinking about taking the role of the submissive vs actor in nature to add to it.

Reads pretty good, actually. Sometimes those wings can give a pre-impression. Couple crits for you, if you are so inclined. a comma after "decency" would work well overall, methinks nest-[sites]? or were you making a play on "nasty"; either way. "bust seats"? what is that? bus seats? if the "nest-sties" was intentional, then I'd believe this was too. The last two lines are - perfect.

God! This was excellent - I could relate to everything you've listed here. The tone is wonderful - the long suffering - yet not willing to choose the same course - to not shed more tears on a situation that has grown pointless and numb. Wonderful - I'm keeping a copy of this one... I give you a 9.

These nicely worded phrases lead to the Queen? I do not see how.

Drivel. Try poetry.

ahhh to bask in the sweet moonlight of my Middle-Derbyshire home. thank you.

Glad you have found somewhere to express yourself where you will not get a good kicking;

For the most part it flows pretty well - I get occasionally hung up on little typos or spelling errors and some apparently personal images but metaphors like "virgin grass wishing to be parted" win the day. okay, "rain-water thin" to indicate a small thing is logically flawed, but hey - what the hell. The best part, however, is hearing the explanation of what it all means. to experience that gap bridged is really the cake under the icing. "just a contrast between the equivalence of nature, and the rigid hierarch[ical] structures of the constructed world." Good stuff.

Not in my dish machine you don't!!!

move (blind) to the end of the preceding stanza. Grass fingers? Or sun fingers? A reach, maybe, make the narrarator the grass/nature? or talk more about the fox club. It feels as if the welcome you got was cold. Perfect start i think.

I have added a comma, 'rain-water, thin as sheen' So as not to describe the grass as rain water thin, but the rain water as sun sheen thin.

The internet has GOBS of samples. Look around. Do you always stutter? writes

That's what I love about the English! They won't let a thing like a horribly fatal sexually transmitted disease, or not having the use of their limbs or digits or a coma or life support bleeps get in between them and their commitment to lacquer.