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on some deleted poem
28 Oct 2003, 12:05 PM
I think it's very brave of you to write such a personal poem.
the sadness carries well here; a nice clean portrayal of a relateable emotion.
Great ending!
Nice ending, i'd work on the rest however.
Cursing someone to ooze. That's a new one.
Oh my.
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on FatHairyWomen - Hey! Look! I'M INCREDIBLY DIM-WITTED! by y2kSlamPoetX
28 Oct 2003, 5:21 PM
None of you are a match for this master of spoken stupidity. I have an off brown belt in martial farts.
Drugs are for weaklings.
An improvement.
Too hive a trip for me.
Betrayal... continual or just happening?
Kind of sappy.
Still sappy.
Excellently done. 23.56
13 views and no votes?! What are you people fucking BLIND! 10!
Satan fears nothing but my Ice scream.
Nice touchy feely. A good view of the intangible shared by two. 22.443
Good druggie!
Each separate image is strong. They jangle when placed together. Like chimes poorly tuned. Instant immolation. Casual demise. Death by change. 21.009