i was have a bad ahir day.

i miss my family that live in another state but we are still pretty close.

was written for the upcoming holiday. to sort of scare the reader in fun.

nicely written

strange poem

i like this poem.

isn't there another verse almost like this one already written?

what are you trying to portray?

not nice

i agree

no way

Working title of course.

Turn your torment to a torrent and cry me a river With such a power title you promised what you failed to deliver

What? Where do you live? Families are fariy tales lady. Ok it's not really that bad but you're sugar coating makes me gag. Really now some families are like that but some are like the ones where the neigbor kid comes over to make sure the kid gets fed because the parents are too strung out to do it themselves and then the parents make the neighbor kid do things a nine year old shouldn't even know about. Others are like the one where the kid goes off to college and the parents move and don't bother telling the kid. Then you have the ones were the dad is long gone, the mother is just barely done giving birth and the baby is in a dumpster.

A poem about people does nothing but a pile of mud is percious enough to be compared to rape?

Hair tends to help some be strong? You must be referring to Samson - the kindly Biblical character who lost his strength when he shaved his head but then prayed to Jesu so he could get it back again and crush a load of people with a building. But the next two lines are sublimely beautiful: When you walk it moves like a ping pong, It could hit others like King Kong, These are the best two lines I have ever read on poemeranker. They capture the essence of hair so succinctly. -10-

It is a well know literary phenomenon that infinitely many people have rhymed "love" with "above", but I've never seen anyone attempt to do it twice in one poeme. This really is such an emotional piece, with an emotion nestling not only on each line, but between each line as well. I'm not an expert on poetry, but when a piece like this is so full of joy, love, pain, emotions, tenderness, hope, fear and wonder, I cannot help but give you a -10-. Thanks.

I can't believe it! It's amazing that you mention a special crown for good families, because in my town that's exactly what we have! Every year, the mayor selects five outstanding families from the town and awards them the Family Prize for friendship, love and courage. This year my family was one of the five! We don't get a crown exactly, but we do get a special medal that we're allowed to wear on special occassions. I guess it's kinda similar to your crown idea! I love my family. -10-

Chillingly delightful! I especially enjoyed the whimsical spasm of joy I underwent upon reading "Knowing that you don't live in an ark". Of course, the price is another four hours of unimaginable agony as my crippled body jerks back and forth within my cruel Wheeled-chair of its own volition, but I daresay it's worth it! 10!!

[_] AABB rhyming scheme [_] About drugs [X] About romantic love [_] About writing [X] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] About the author's social pastimes [_] Arbitrary indentation [X] Arbitrary line breaks [_] Autobiographical but written in the third person [_] Clerical errors [X] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain) [_] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart) [X] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched) [X] Devoid of rhyme [X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia) [_] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia) [_] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery [_] Ellipses used overabundantly [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Internet shorthand or emoticons [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] 'Lyrics' [X] Melodramatic [X] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [_] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Rage against the machine [X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimonious [X] Self-obsessed [X] Sentimental [_] Smugly-named protagonist [X] Thesaurophilia [_] Untitled [X] Vicarious wish fulfilment -14-