| Re: A Lesson by nypoet22 |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
21-Mar-07/5:46 AM |
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Sir, I am glad to see that you are able and well; we never did finish that renga.
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Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
21-Mar-07/5:48 AM |
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I'd much prefer it if the final line was "snared by a bear trap", but I guess it works as it is.
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| Re: Untitled by Dovina |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
21-Mar-07/5:49 AM |
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This is a terrible haiku about an 'untitled'.
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Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
21-Mar-07/5:51 AM |
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| Re: Her Mitts by Nepanthe |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
21-Mar-07/5:53 AM |
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By the way, I couldn't get the link to your music to work.
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Dental Panic 84.85.206.227 |
21-Mar-07/4:21 PM |
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I like the first part. After 'Of course, I miss', you start filling in the space that the poem has created. You could even drop the of course line too, I think. It's evident that you're going to miss that shot. That's what the poem's about.
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| Re: Untitled by Dovina |
Dental Panic 84.85.206.227 |
21-Mar-07/4:37 PM |
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haiku should be left to japanese.
western haiku always has this slight touch of sentiment, morality or metaphor.
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Dental Panic 84.85.206.227 |
21-Mar-07/5:20 PM |
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Prince of Void 80.71.125.247 |
22-Mar-07/8:01 AM |
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" u dont know what u are talking about do u ? "
everyone is a good storyteller ..what's big deal ? fellow
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| Re: Writer's Block by cheese.doodles |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
22-Mar-07/9:52 AM |
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| Re: Campfire by MacFrantic |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
22-Mar-07/9:53 AM |
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Macfrantic, firstly you have a rubbish username, secondly this poem is moribund.
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| Re: The Small Ones by Dovina |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
22-Mar-07/9:58 AM |
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This poem makes light of the deeply fecund stirrings of the author whilst, almost unbelievably, illustrating the juvenile chauvinism that most men exhibit to their womenfolk. Truly, a Duchy Original hobnob perched on the side of a eunuch's head could not create more worrying signs of modern day degradation than the impassioned twittering of this middle aged proto-crone.
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| Re: The Small Ones by Dovina |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
22-Mar-07/1:33 PM |
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I liked the idea of the evolutionary equivalent of spiked hair and tongue studs, and the two lines about barnacles and termite queens are good. The rest sort of lost me. I am not in a very perceptive mood tonight though, so you shall have to forgive me.
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| Re: Oliver by Stephen Robins |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
22-Mar-07/1:35 PM |
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This is a work of sheer beauty, I intend to print it out and plaster it above my bed so that every morning I am reminded of the wond'rousness of life.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
22-Mar-07/1:42 PM |
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| Re: Oliver by Stephen Robins |
Dovina 208.127.114.102 |
22-Mar-07/2:27 PM |
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If it were not for your straining chief, Oliver, this could move erotically into a second verse of laughingly intense intimacy.
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| Re: This life is sheer nonsense by Prince of Void |
Dovina 208.127.114.102 |
22-Mar-07/2:29 PM |
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So eat, drink and be merry for tomorrow you die. Give up all this senseless gloom.
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| Re: Oops by John Rambo |
Skamper 202.6.132.194 |
23-Mar-07/9:08 PM |
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LMAO...well constructed, story told to great effect!
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Skamper 202.6.132.194 |
23-Mar-07/9:10 PM |
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Not bad! Bit of a giggle...
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| Re: Oliver by Stephen Robins |
Skamper 202.6.132.194 |
23-Mar-07/9:12 PM |
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Self wrapping is easiest, less costly if you can grasp the ribbon with one hand and teeth...
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