regarding some deleted poem...	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:24 PM
happiness - a concept under-rated never gained by those who over-played it... Nice write! Ever think the 9 baskets was enough?
regarding some deleted poem...	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:28 PM
lollipops prevent the foolish from dribbling...A gob-stopper for all those who missed the point! Nice write...
Re: The Small Ones by Dovina	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:34 PM
Middle-age takes another step toward the doddering of those past thinking, while the young, who survive become the wise - all heads now nodding. Fabulous write and imaginative story-telling.
Re: A Lesson by nypoet22	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:36 PM
My kinda class - energetic and noisy..
Re: Whispers the Pariah by Enkidu	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:41 PM
Nice/twisted/descriptive and fast! I like the suckling as it feels like the shore is a parasite on the mountains it washes upon. Not sure about using 'from' in the line...bursts from within...Reads just as well without, humble opinion only.
Re: Thinking for you by J.B. Manning	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:52 PM
Just Out! Standard answer... did you forget the 'e' in slime?
regarding some deleted poem...	Skamper 202.6.128.94	23-Mar-07/10:01 PM
Hmm.....too many words used over..You was established early on, probably no need to keep repeating it. love-grew/beard-grew, too closely together I feel. I get the images, and the context, very creative..maybe work better as a free-verse piece.
Re: Untitled by Dovina	Skamper 202.6.128.94	23-Mar-07/10:05 PM
Are you all related? Has anyone fled this place in tatters? Speaking of the reviews here, not the poem. which is lovely, I like haiku and even sweetness has it's place..nice!
Re: Settling In by jessicazee	jessicazee 65.30.187.185	24-Mar-07/4:49 AM
You rule.
Re: Oops by John Rambo	jessicazee 65.30.187.185	24-Mar-07/4:51 AM
I love the word "sac".
Re: Paper Maker by Skamper	jessicazee 65.30.187.185	24-Mar-07/4:56 AM
some good lines --- 2nd stanza's first words over-prepositional, maybe marry up a few lines? Love: "with shoulder-shrug cares"; "try to stick them/felt-tipped". Good.
Re: Hairball by jessicazee	Dovina 208.127.114.132	24-Mar-07/5:58 AM
Writers in English often think haiku must have three lines with 5, 7, and 5 syllables, a misunderstanding of the Japanese onji. Concision is key. thing on my rug, I forgot to wipe thank you cat Just a suggestion.
regarding some deleted poem...	nypoet22 147.70.245.135	24-Mar-07/8:02 AM
me too, me too, i want an insult poem too... I would grade this poem a 7, but for this one i decided to use your grading scale instead of mine.
Re: The Finding by Skamper	Dovina 208.127.114.139	24-Mar-07/8:56 AM
Advice is a form of nostalgia. Dispensing it is a way of fishing the past from the disposal, wiping it off, painting over the ugly parts and recycling it for more than it's worth. Thus I render what they have often preached to me: you are too vague; some nice lines in your three poems here, but whatever they are saying is too well camouflaged. But you’re doing okay here and seem able to tolerate guff, and thus might last awhile.
Re: the magic rock by nypoet22	Dovina 208.127.114.163	24-Mar-07/4:24 PM
Yes to the first two questions, no to the third, and ace to the last verse.
Re: Guarded Fool by drnick	Dovina 208.127.114.163	24-Mar-07/4:33 PM
Either join the army or a woman. The last two lines suggest the latter, and so do I.
Re: Hairball by jessicazee	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:31 PM
Nice images, well I say nice because it appears without force, as for the actual image..real nice!
Re: the magic rock by nypoet22	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:35 PM
You could lost the 'but'...always seems a way of apology for what went before. Very clever write, and one to hang on the mind for a while.
Re: Guarded Fool by drnick	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:39 PM
Love this! So stringent, seems to hold form of a rhyme scheme then loses it, excellently played out, not only in words but in the way the mind tries to be bound by form, only to lose it and let it flow...make sense? I usually don't...
Re: A twisted Trail in Eden’s Garden by Dovina	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:51 PM
Choices and hindsight, glimpses of hidden possibilities all written here. Not 100% sure of the meaning, but I appreciate what it brings to me.