Possibly wonderful. 7.532.

You are a lump of melting cuntbutter. -2-

Wonderful, and that's not just because I'm wonderful. 8.542.

wyrd to yo mudda.

I have been shocked into labour.

Shiveringly shocking!

A piece for a non-hostile world. 9.834.

You use too many lurge words.

This really sucks at my lovely sock.

Completely shocking on many varying and twisting levels. A charm of a renaissance mind!

[X] AABBCC rhyming scheme [_] About romantic love [_] Arbitrary indentation [_] Arbitrary line breaks [X] Autobiographical but in the third person [X] Braggadocious [_] Clerical errors [X] Cliched rhymes (love/above etc.) [_] Cliched adolescent metaphors of darkness for despair etc. [_] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments [_] Devoid of rhyme [_] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices [_] Devoid of wond'rous or fantastical imagery [_] Drug references [_] Elves, unicorns, etc. [X] Exclamation points used to mark 'the funny bits' [X] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] 'Lyrics' [X] Melodramatic [X] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [X] Overabundance of ellipses [X] Overuse of Latinate words and/or convoluted sentence structures [X] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Protagonist has a smug name [X] Rage against the machine [_] References to the author's 'social life' [_] Repetition of a single word or phrase to the point of nausea [X] Sanctimoniously moral [_] Sappy [_] Suicide-related [X] Wish fulfilment

I don't believe you are deserving of my insult. Next!

Too shocking to be letters arranged!

interesting......i like it, but KC it needs more flow. i don't want to sound like the rest of these mean spirited people, but it does need a little work, but i like it the way it is now. i am sure once you have time you will make it into a work of art. i have no doubt of your capabilities. = )

i thought i had an obsession, your in fucking love... two weeks from now you might be stalking him and sneaking around the bushes of his house. lol. talk about asskissing, you probably know the texture of his intestines by now.

Of such shock thine lice must wiggleeth upwardeth.

Also, I'm not smart enough to figure out if it's one person or several persons using the same computer and connection or what. many voices...one address. If you can do it...then do it. otherwise you're just jealous for my noticing someone else is prolific...if indecent.

I expect you fashioned all of your own belongings from a collection of sticks and wheat.

HUMPTY DUMPTY JUMPED OFF THE EMPIRE STATE BUILDING scrambled eggs for breakfast, shell fragments saved to be used as toothpicks.

How utterly sh-shocking!