Irony is often ironic.

Does your name rhyme with Janus or anus?

Well written and a good bite of juicy beef and gypsy caravan camp fire love. 10.

Reminds me of "If I had a Hammer". Are you talking about god throughout this, or was that just one stanza. If it was just meant to be the one stanza, it seemed out of place, but if your love poem was about your relationship with god, I think you could use another reference to make it clearer.

sounds like there's some guilt behind the pleasure of the apple juice and masturbating, yes?

What do you expect if you go out with someone who plays the acoustic guitar?

Is your poetry non-sensical on purpose? And is the dialogue internal or external?

I loved these images, "you never stop at the skin of a word but ride that instinct through my veins." beautiful

lispy- licious. That was fun. Damn, why didn't God say stay away from the temptation of brussel sprouts?

You're a fickle pickle, which is tastier than the other kind of pickle.

I like all of the references to rotting and impurity, it reminds me of those internet addicts who work as TA's in college computer labs with their greasy, unbathed appearances and smells- you know the ones who hang out in the lab even when they are off the clock. Exactly.

What does it actually mean when people indent the text and stuff in places where you wouldn't expect, and put carriage returns in inappropriate places? This isn't the most extreme example, I'm sure, but I don't understand how this poem would be any different from one which had the same words in it but had all the lines starting at the same horizontal position.

Nice description and way of using it to make some political commentary. Why do you start out with "when 'you' went crosseyed" and then switch to "I". I think you should tell the reader it is you/the narrator all along. In this line, "did not last damn it me" is me a typo? I think the plural of lens may be lenses.

rather enjoyable at the end and a bit before, starts out a bit slow, but pays off.

A stunning piece of electric eel, but not quite a tarantula wasp face peel.

I liked the sweating part, but it needs more sex.

A football on fire with fur.

Is it tigers that have forked penises?

Why no garlic?

Why'd you have to ruin the illusion and expose that God's Wife's real name is Patricia? It's so ... ordinary! That was the damage done here, the character damage was reflected onto you.