SupremeDreamer
on Why Stay? by LuckyJoe
10 Sep 2003, 6:47 AM
hrmm "icey tomb".. now.. where have i heard that one before?
heh, heres a 6.
No one says anything about it because they're perverted and want to look at it ;):P
The last two lines just don't seem to fit with the first six.
Simple and rich like a life that is a continuous, flowing offering, spilling over and touching all that come in contact--wow
Fire is surley my favourite of all four elements.
Yet technically it isn't an organism, it doesn't have organs to be an organism, or tissues, or any cell structure at all. Yet it does fill in all criteria for life:
Reproduction: Fire can make more fire, that's how forest fires start from matches.
Respire: It takes in oxygen.
Grows: It gets larger (although its a bit dodgy, as it doesn't use cell reproduction, specialization or enlargment)
Feeds: What is the wick, or the dry grass if noot food?
Sensitivity: It responds to its environment, gets smaller if there isn't enough oxygen, larger if there is more fuel etc.
Move: Again, I refer you to flash fires in dry areas.
Excrete: Like us, it excretes Carbon Dioxide.
I can't beleieve I just did that. I was shit at science!!!
Sheepish mount - Don Quixote almost. I never thought I'd see basic military training in a poem like this either.
About six months to a year depending on the people. Lust is purely sexual no other basic involved :P
I want to seduce Zeus's swan.
resurrection of the old. ITS JUDGEMENT DAY!
I like the content, but the flow is somewhat choppy, hard to follow. Nice thought.
It's pretty good. It's not one of your best, but it's good. Um, I don't think you can use that last line though. I think even using a single line that someone else wrote is still Plagiarism, isn't it?
Maybe you should have your buttocks amputated.
This poeme is plagiarised.
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
I am also a F.R.O.G.
ah the pain ah...uha..aaaaaaaaaa..-0
fire defies gravity
0... nothing...
genuine--a relationship anyone would cherish
Mighty. Your kung-fu is awesome.