nice work. 8.

joe, this "fates end" crap seem... really over done.. worse than that, it sounds all corny..

That is great, but clean up the typos, especially if this is a serious tribute to someone.

Well Done :)

Where is Jesus in all of this?

How could you tell if you were blind?

Pissing a long time ago When I was a much younger fellow, I left two extensions in the sand of my even younger fellow. tc

It's impossible to stop thinking of Jesus. Just try it and he's still there; you're not thinking about Him but he's still there otherwise you wouldn't know who you weren't thinking about.

this poem absolutely blew me away. i'd give it a 666, but the highest i can go is a single digit.

Very interesting.

I was hoping this poem was going to be about intimacy involving regurgitation. I was sadly disapointed. I pox be on you!

That was nice. You did a great job describing the pain and excitement around anticipating the reading the letter. I think you could include a line about why the narrator chose to wait until after her bath to open it. This line "With great thought, I scratch out my reply," seemed a little rough because "scratching out" a reply seems to contradict your narrator's writing it "with great thought". I'd imagine her doing graceful swirly letters, trying to make the writing of the letter last, or even sleeping with it under her pillow until the morning, when she'd reread it, then reply. She knows it'll be a while before she hears from the lover again. (If the narrator is you, I advise the use of email for long distance relationships, if possible. I was even able to give and recieve emails my girlfriend once every couple of weeks when she was at war in Iraq over the last year.)

This sounds a lot like one of those email chain letters that my sentimental co-workers send me. Is that what you were going for? I am sure it'd be appreciated in that genre.

Wonderful and touching story. true natural talent, from a special girl.

Neat poem. How are ya Sliver?

I think you may have neglected to arrange all of your lines into the corrcet order. Be more careful next time.

I like expressing my emotions too. What a coincidence!!! Some examples of this may be found in my most recent masterpieces, "Vest" and "Have you seen my spectacles?"

Why does your narrator say "my heart is not mine to give"? Even if they are cheating, they still own their own hearts, right? Could they really help giving each other their hearts if they were so passionate?

Yikes. Hope this is fiction!

you are dating a china doll biker?