Scraping the crust off with FACT-shaped spoon, these are the news headlines: MAN WITH REVERSE MIDAS COMPLEX TURNS OWN FACE INTO PILE OF GUTS RANCID OCTOCARP FOUND SINGING IN DRAWER EAT MY LEG OFF PLEADS MUTANT BEEF PROBE Those are the headlines.................. goodnight.

"My eyes conspired and shed their light that they might guide your little boat and you'd arrive one night, at the shore where I had lain alone so long at the edge of a great dark sea. And so you came with your spark, stretched your hand out and touched me." Very descriptive and an enjoyable read!

Hi, I've missed you. 10.

First of all...it's great to read some seious writing! You are talented. Second, I'd like to say how wonderul your imagery is. You draw the reader in with each line.

What an excellent display of madness! This person seems terrible. I enjoyed this piece.

I like it except that it sounds like more of a speech than a poem

"Doesn't sound like something Jesus would do. Must have been a bad day. Even the greatest philanthropists have their moments of self-doubt." I agree...I do like away better than comes as well. :)

"I have to agree with EAger. Well, mostly. I'm not sure I'd really want to see a well-considered, artistic, [yadda]... but this isn't it in any case. first thing to work on, in my opinion, would be the flow/cadence/rhythm. Really, for starters, count the syllables. adjust accordingly. I'd also either stick with a set rhyme pattern, or not--some of the ends are halfrhymes, some not rhymes, some... eh. (you're pretty good at rhymind b and d, but the rest are awkwardly not one or the other). to work on the content itself... that just takes time/experience/practice/trying, I think." It does take time. Some of my first writing was rhyme. I really don't go that direction anymore, but I do have respect for those who can use it well. Anyway, I think you need to use more word play. Go out...find some great words to replace the norm. You'll not only learn new words from this, but you'll grow as a writer. Good luck!

Bello! beautiful, man. Imagery cut apart and stacked and exploded. Assimilated and studied and polished into a shiney black metal ball, just small enough to swallow.

"the sky a sepulcher"... "as night pitches a canopy" Brava.

Ok come on, I've seen the movie "Ten Things I Hate About You Too". . .this is kind of a rip-off of that

Whoa that is so good. I like both how it flows and the content.

Very vivid, thoroughfare. welcome back and let the maddening begin

image and ambiguity, violence a fine piece

good this, I meant to comment when you wrote it but my computer crashed. Of all your poems this one and the if people still dont know why people hate america they should get out some more one are ones that I keep remembering

It sounds a little too forced.

I like this...it's fresh and alive. You've got a great flow going on here! Bravo~

I wrote this after watching "Band of Brothers". Not my usual write. :P

ah, bill! i wish i could hear you speak this.

what did you mean by the?