Re: The Medium of Dunce by Ranger	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/12:30 PM
Damn, this is good! I like the rhyme scheme which is unforced and adds to the read and flow. How about a 10 plus.
Re: cold war by Dental Panic	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/1:44 PM
Interesting comment regarding the "conveyor belt." The warming of the earth causing the breakdown of these natural currents which, paradoxically, leads to an overall cooling event. Kind of damned if you do and damned if you don't. Regardless, we are in big trouble with little or no acknowledgement by our president and the multi-national corporations which are in control. Profit at any price and damn the coonsequences mentality. Go Gore! Oh, almost forgot. Great poem.
Re: Take that thing off your head by lukehanney	mr cunt 85.210.200.211	7-Mar-07/3:49 PM
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Re: Luke Hanney's 43rd Dream by lukehanney	mr cunt 85.210.200.211	7-Mar-07/3:49 PM
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Re: A Reflective Window by lukehanney	mr cunt 85.210.200.211	7-Mar-07/3:50 PM
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regarding some deleted poem...	mr cunt 85.210.200.211	7-Mar-07/3:54 PM
I have smelled a better cunty poem than this.
regarding some deleted poem...	mr cunt 85.210.200.211	7-Mar-07/3:55 PM
Total shit.
Re: Mirror by Quarton	Quarton 12.206.226.220	7-Mar-07/8:14 PM
Thank you.
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 76.172.249.205	7-Mar-07/9:18 PM
It doesn't have an obvious name to me. I tried for about ten minutes, but it's obvious I'll need to let this one stir in my brain for a bit.
regarding some deleted poem...	lrustagi 59.180.192.85	7-Mar-07/10:09 PM
a bit story like...but a nice little tale...and who says every poem has to rhyme and jingle...fair attempt
regarding some deleted poem...	lrustagi 59.180.192.85	7-Mar-07/10:16 PM
what about Mis(s)interpreted for a title...by the way a different style, must say
Re: A Rendezvous by lrustagi	lrustagi 59.180.192.85	7-Mar-07/11:03 PM
as an afterthought, i suppose "Sleepless" might be a better title...the readers pls. also suggest an apt title .
Re: Rock and Roll by wilco	lrustagi 59.180.192.85	7-Mar-07/11:09 PM
nice personification...i think the whole stanza should not be reapeated considering the lyric as a whole is a short one...may be repeating one or two key lines would be better. The lyric makes its point clear in a motivated sense. good attempt.
Re: Quantum Reality by Quarton	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/1:36 AM
Interesting read - in a few places it sounds more science textbook-y than poetic ('ever increasing complexity' etc.) I liked stanza 5 and its cosmic dance - perhaps a reference to Holst's Planets Suite would have been appropriate there? It's certainly a piece with some education behind it - I like that, but my failing is a short attention span. Maybe cutting it into two or three sections would make it easier for simpletons like myself to read in one sitting? Good poem though.
Re: A whole load of cunts by mr cunt	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/1:43 AM
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! You are hilarious! Those were ip addresses from my college system. -10- for making me cry with laughter.
Re: Mirror by Quarton	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/1:51 AM
I like the gentleness of this piece, if you could scratch out a couple of the cliched phrases and put a little more innovation into some lines (such as the last one) I'd enjoy this even more.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/2:03 AM
"So you took him to bed and when he wanted sex you stormed out in a moral huff?" Besides, I was that diner and I did not appreciate it when a stranger went in me. I may have stood up, but I'd rather not have my stool pushed in.
Re: Dancing for dinner by fevriere	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/2:04 AM
Top drawer stuff.
Re: A Wanderlust To The New by fevriere	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/2:16 AM
Aside from 'smally dance' this is so good. I don't know why people haven't read you more on here.
Re: Rock and Roll by wilco	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/2:19 AM
I'd like to hear this one, as I can't tell whether the rhyme of 'fury' and 'money' (and 'Mississippi') will be distracting or not.