regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 81.103.124.179	3-Mar-07/8:31 AM
Good stuff
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 81.103.124.179	3-Mar-07/8:35 AM
Good metre, but stanza two is grammatically...well, ambiguous at best.
Re: Edna's Christmas Farewell by Edna Sweetlove	Dr Peter Douglas 80.225.124.196	3-Mar-07/1:43 PM
Dear oh dear edna what a sorry Chrimbo! Never mind theres always easter to look forward to.
Re: The ceremony of death by Prince of Void	Dovina 208.127.90.14	4-Mar-07/3:21 PM
Don’t believe Rocky; this is not a good poem; he only agrees with your position. Hell, if I write about the virtue of zeroing, he’ll leap all over it. No, but if you do, he will. All he has for me is ‘honey bun” and “squeal.” “Of” on line 2 surely should be “of.” “Of buildings had laid in ruins” should surely lose the “had.” To name just a few.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 208.127.90.14	4-Mar-07/3:26 PM
Bethy, your other stuff has reality, a gut feeling of having been there. This, I'm sorry, is just cliche. It's no different from what anybody could rattle off about their home. Sorry, I usually like your posts. Keep coming back.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 208.127.90.14	4-Mar-07/3:28 PM
Leave it at the first line and stop writing poetry! Love is better!
regarding some deleted poem...	mr cunt 85.210.193.192	4-Mar-07/6:28 PM
This is about as fucking funny as cancer. What a cunt you are.
Re: An All-American Fairy by Edna Sweetlove	mr cunt 85.210.193.192	4-Mar-07/6:33 PM
Fab Fab Fabbo. What a cunty poem!
Re: Two More Cunts Who Are One Cunt by mr cunt	mr cunt 85.210.220.79	5-Mar-07/3:11 AM
Is Dovina a cunt too? I'll go and read her poetry,
Re: Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	mr cunt 85.210.220.79	5-Mar-07/3:13 AM
I was recommended to read your poems by Rockmage and having struggled through this, he is totall correct. You are a cunt.
Re: End by Dovina	mr cunt 85.210.220.79	5-Mar-07/3:14 AM
The best bit about this is that relief-giving word: "end".
Re: Out of this crowd a mistress or a friend by Prince of Void	mr cunt 85.210.220.79	5-Mar-07/3:15 AM
Boring, pompous drivel. Are you Rockmage or Shusshin in disguise?
Re: THE MISSING HEART by Prince of Void	mr cunt 85.210.220.79	5-Mar-07/3:16 AM
I LAUGHED SO LONG AND LOUDLY THAT I PISSED MY PANTS! TOTAL POMPOUS RUBBISH! I SHALL ADD YOU TO ME "CUNTS" LIST.
Re: her love fading in the haze by Prince of Void	mr cunt 85.210.220.79	5-Mar-07/3:17 AM
So bad, I feel physically ill.
Re: cold war by Dental Panic	half.italian 76.172.249.205	5-Mar-07/9:06 AM
I think you could stay with the analogy through the last line. Don't give it to us. I got it right away. Nice poem.
Re: Quantum Reality by Quarton	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/11:20 AM
Thanks for the comments. I love Vonnegut and the movie version of Slaughterhouse Five is one of my favorites. It is a "must see" in my opinion and is almost a cult movie as Billy Pilgrim becomes unstuck in time. I am curious. What is the other half? Also, your post was deleted and I am not sure why. Any suggestions as this has happened several times?
Re: Quantum Reality by Quarton	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/11:37 AM
Dovina--Yeah, it does wander but so does my mind. It also wonders in regard to science, cosmology and quantum mechanics. Rather esoteric stuff and I suspect even the theoretical physicists are unable to unerstand on an intellectual level. Ineffable is descriptive of this enigma. Regardless, we are all connected despite the illusion of separateness.
regarding some deleted poem...	Prince of Void 80.71.122.112	6-Mar-07/11:40 AM
I hate abomination For taking an action To have sex With the fatal attraction Made the son of sins Being the Holy Father Above land of crosses And for the sexual obsessions I’ll carry the cross on my shoulder For son and father Fucking each other For the holy ghost
regarding some deleted poem...	Prince of Void 80.71.122.112	6-Mar-07/11:40 AM
I hate abomination For taking an action To have sex With the fatal attraction Made the son of sins Being the Holy Father Above land of crosses And for the sexual obsessions I’ll carry the cross on my shoulder For son and father Fucking each other For the holy ghost
regarding some deleted poem...	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/11:55 AM
Occam's razor is alive and well.