"you need a girlfriend" is what you said, "cuz you can't be close to anybody else" Is the best part of this, and also the least pimple like

wicked

imagery is bordering on disturbing. 'On the floor' is a nice touch. Are they actually on the floor uncared for, or a hospital floor. Not sure I grasp the plant metaphor though. Maybe it is about a plant? with a brain?

is this all first draft or just the letting one go part? liked the ridiculing of the girl admiring a crap piece of art should be devilled egg. Otherwise it would read de-viled which it certainly was not

is this all first draft or just the letting one go part? liked the ridiculing of the girl admiring a crap piece of art should be devilled egg. Otherwise it would read de-viled which it certainly was not

Last night my room-mate punched a raccoon. Life is surreal on the edge between urban and rural.

Christ, that was a tuna tube steak in a tuba on the tundra surrounded by tanya harding handrinos.

I am taller than Horus8 - and better looking.

As always your writing intrigues. I had a problem with line 2 its a bit of a flow killer. However the way you used lizard was good, though they tend to turret their eyes other than move due to their prey instict. The best for me was where you went with the message and your strength for me has always been that you have a strong beginning, middle, and end, a depth in words yet with a clarity of expression. 8

Horus will love this. You just can't put the man down and he bleeds olive.

greek mythology.. never much cared for this kind of poetry.. oh well, one day i'll suddenly start enjoying it.

the writing here was banal.. dull.. it felt dead.. was that the intention? 7

I have made a note for me and my bro

hermaphrodite pickle? anyway enjoyed this 'night out'

4?

weightless

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greek mythology is certainly rich material. Think this is trying to be a description. Enjoyable, not many rhymes hephaestus with discus.

must you always begin your poems this way? it's arresting

:.) (pimple)