haha, I like the second verse. I like both, but the second best.

I like this one. The point is clear, the rthym fluid, and your personality shows through. Smart.

I like it. Picturesque like pork loins being salted on your mobile patio.

Awesome. Just freaking Awesome.

Keep on trucking.

not bad.

hmmm

-7-

very very fluid.

uh...

I sort of liked this.

I'm not sure who the blue giving me six for all my revisions is. But it is very kind of you to keep coming back. thanks

Liked your revisions, I loved the "raped mouth" part. Some parts were hard to follow, though.

I liked the first three paragraphs. The fourth one broke apart, I think. Maybe massage the second and forth line in the last paragraph?

wow. A man of words I am, but I only have one for you. Wow.

hmmmmm

Was this inspired by craigslist? hehe, I like it.

as always, you made john look like a moron.. course, you could of left it unparodied.. it speaks for itself lmao. 10.

All in one night? Jerry (Garcia) wanna be? I liked the "tickle" with "hermaphrodite pickle".

what i liked: "And the fairy tales forgive us/For the lies that we have known/And the angels In our/ lives/Become devils in disguise/And everything we do Is the hardest thing we’ve done what i didn't like: And I’m running from myself/While you’re sitting on a shelf -8-