I like it, but something slipped somewhere in the middle. I'm not sure what it was. You're very good though. I can tell you're a very educated person. One of lyrical caliber to be reckoned with.

Hmmm I like the flow and message of this poem.

This poem is great. If I were you, I would keep it close to me and maybe rework it a few different ways just to see where it takes you. It has the essence of a def poetry performance for sure!

Did you write this or did someone else? Instead of inserting a phrase explaining your spelling errors, why not just take the time to use spell check?

too much use of the word "old".

I love this. It's disgusting and beautiful at the same time. Like life.

If I were itchy skin, I too would let her in my bum.

Skinned doesn't touch skinned. That is an error.

this tries for something it cannot have. like a bawat pasikate on the grab.

not sure where this one was going.

very educational.

perfectly lucid but lacking a spark

very nice. I like the way it flows and closes.

I like this poem very much. It has emotion, fluid verse, and sort of...kind of reminds me of when I scratch a chaulk board for fun.

but I'll put it on poemranker anyway see what everyone thinks?

Excellent. Up to we are equal in blackness is a poem in itself. It saddens me that your the one person who would never have one positive thing to say about any of my poems, not one. I really liked this poem and you can say what you will of mine. I would however repsectfully ask you to read my poem 'The Blooding' or 'The Grave' and tell me what you liked and what you didn't like. Thank You Antony ---------------9

Very interesting. Expressive in a provocative and unrelenting manor.

Why does she go around sleeping with all those guys? Does she really know their intentions? Does she understand every bing about bem?

This is a lyric and it's barely a seven.

too cliche' for me.