Shardik
on Paintball's Flight by loneshadow29
3 Aug 2003, 7:35 PM
Cocaine John Travolta Hallucinations
And so goes life at the disco after 2:00 pm.
Humerous. Black.
Good stuff as always.
Which birds would those be? Owls and nightingales?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
4 Aug 2003, 12:51 AM
Someone gave me a "0" on this and was too much of a coward to say why...hmmm...
Hmmm.. A bit long, the ending was great, try it this way. Lose the ghost stanza, and I think the poet stanza doesn't really fit. Other that I see potential. Both to make something very artistic and to fuck it up. Have fun.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
4 Aug 2003, 12:39 AM
Very softly and sweetly put...9
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
4 Aug 2003, 12:42 AM
This makes me think of a tranquil, babbling brook...and Jesus smiling from behind puffy, white clouds...10
Now look at what ya done! Damnit all, ya upset the whole apple cart! I think ya better leave be4 more people get pist off
HA HA HA HA...It's no wonder she died when you were born! Have ya wondered what part of you went with her, or maybe you were the cause of her death! Damned if I would have stuck around with a kid like you. But then I dont make dumb shit movies or play a Mickey Mouse guitar, and sing Mickey songs either. Ah keep on trying, maybe as you mature you will get it. Seems ya got this crowd believing you are a writer! HA HA HA. What a total ass you are.
Oh yeah denial, yep you're in it alright.
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Swinging with the air, now THERE is a good title for something.
Forgive you, why, what have you done now?
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perhaps sloven might work.. just a weak suggestion.
What I'd really like to know is what a guy with your talents as a cinematagrapher, writer and musicain (did I mention just an all around conceited bastard?)is doing sitting in front of a computer at 7:30? It must be your devoted fans bekoning for your attention.
Not to worry this old man got it figured out! ( I Think!)
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Don, you must help, sweet Thom I fear does not care for my two cents? I have been naughty friend, should I let Thom be my pal and bury the hatchet, or should I bury the hatchet?
Also, I disagreed about your feelings on the tortured, and orphans. We will win, because we already have. Go with the flow, the path of least resistence until it's time to resist, than the dam will crack as planned.
Rosalina Damron
NADA
Ah, yesss, pisss of mind.
holy fuck.. LEAVE POEM RANKER.. this is the worste pile of shit ive ever seen. fucking christ.. torture!!! stop it before i fucking chop you into a caesar salad. 0
Beautiful.
Yes! Lucifer