cleverdevice
on some deleted poem
3 Aug 2003, 2:55 PM
Greatful for what?
Brilliant.
"Butterflies of the night, maybe." YES! YES! GOOD CHRIST! Why didn't I think of that? You my friend have Swiss ovened yourself tepid. The last Butterfly of the night that I bumped into? Cocooned me inside of the darkness of my infernal internal struggle of pain and stuff, and let me just tell you... It was a fucking gag. Oh, shit, you meant a moth, my bad, what was I thinking? AH YES! about those butterflys of the night! Flee! run away!
LMAO.. btw, nice going with the repetition of the plum.. but it cant cure everyone man.. some people are just too thick for the fruits medicine to sink in. 10
yeah.. i cant stand any insects myself. 8
Its only a three line poem so obviously you cant put too much in and I think it doesn't finish well. Personally I'd try
Tribesmen raise in arms
Soldiers lie them down again,
Not to wake once more
Happy happy joy joy.
It's log!
About time.
"spread" should be "bring". Or if you're a maniac
"scream".
Did you think the person was a guy or a girl?
Did the guy or girl take the pill, or not?
Did they have sex, or was the guy or girl just in intense thought?
Did the guy or girl leave or stay afterwards?
let's answer these shall we?
1. Neither, I thought they were you
2. Yes, but it was no pill it was black cock.
3. Neither,they mudwrestled their egos and lost miserably
4. Both, but astroprejectedly.
"The Onomatopoeia of our bodies" Wow, that sounds like an anniversary plaque that would fly off the shelves at Walmart. Especially in the pathetically contrived & ripped off culture I'm sure you get off on waving "hi, mr. smith too".
Very nice, but I don't understand the title. Pleaee explain?
Hmm mm. Well, it's odd and a bit tingly.
Know it well.
Very True Indeed. -10-
Like to argue much?
It appears that people are having a delayed reaction to voting on your work?
Goofy footed.
That went over like a Led Zepplin.