abecedarian
on some deleted poem
28 Jul 2003, 6:46 PM
only half sly, but all poem
I liked this, soothing flow and feel. Good Job. 9.
WAHOO! Heil HORUS! LEAD ME MY GENERAL! ONWARDS ONWARDS, TWARDS THE FUTURE.. i like the pictures though.. ;P 10.
Nice. Discovery channel narrative.. i enjoyed the read. 9.
Aye, home protection kicks ass.. ;) 8.
Tar tar, 101.
want some calamari with that tartar sauce? ;x 8.
8, for the legs now floating, dead.
Everyone does start small... even after writing years and years its nice to go back to the roots and see if the simplisity (spelling) is still there. Often times its hard to get back to your roots. My first poem I ever wrote was back in 4th grade... short...sweet...simple. Here it is...
May we never depart,
May the love always stay true.
Shall it not stay,
Can destiny discover that we were made for each other?
May life lead us the right way.
Please hold on.
Nice... not sure the whole meaning of the poem... but do we the readers truely have to understand to still enjoy poetry? Keep up the work and keep on writing.
This thing about put me in a legoleptic fit, so it certainly is a good thing that I am lamiacious, and therefore not affected by such afflictions. Certainly this is better than some of the the lalochezia that usually occurs here.
Nice poem... gives a message but also stays hid. I like poems that can't be fully understood leaving the reader room to fill in the gaps as the see fit... thats how some of the best poetry ever written has been. Keep up the good work and keep on writing.
I've seen several animals get the axe recently: a roach, a fox, and now an octopus. Fry them all up, I say, and lets have one last giant barbeque.
Until it's king of the mountain, again.
lol. "but that isn't different
that is called being alone" vintage.
Like it a lot - I agree with Horus8 however "of conscience" seems to muddy the last line. 8
fake, originality is nothing if it dosent come from the heart and this sounds as if you have tried to use metaphors cleaverly instead of speaking what you treuly feel...therefore the poem is to impress rather than to express your emotion? pah what do i know!
not a haiku, last line was funny though
Ha!
Tasty.