i feel all soft inside when reading this.. 9.

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Can I make requests, and be like a 'ranger' and haul lil bastards in?

sigh... To sleep, for the first time in forever.

that's great seriously it is

EMINEM!! god pink bunny i go away for 10 days and youve written god knows how many poems now i have to READ them all!! actually ill check out ur new pic first - see if ur as fit as u say u are. (o;

babe i cant belive u got dumped! what a stupid reason as well....hmm better picture this time tho! (u seem to have interesting red hair?!)

Hmm i find if ur happy u tend not to write that well - only tortured writings make good works?! i was on the top 10 once... oh happy days.

But hey, if you've got six pack abs, you're good to go right? right? Fine job pardno. Good to see you're still pluggin'

The first four lines really don't reflect the quality of the rest of this poem. The good stuff really starts with the 5th line. This line is also a little to cliche to fit in w/ the rest of the poem: "For I dreamt the warm, welcoming wonder of your kiss"

What a Gentleman. All of Those Capitalized Words Take A Lot of Effort But Don't Seem to Add Much.

This IS a lonely place.

"Panoramica" and "views of enslaved cattle" work well together, as do "Kakistocracy" and "Citizens Cained". I'm not sure if I'm getting the best complete picture, but the whole reminds me of Fast Food Nation.

"I fully understand that the living need to remember." What do they need to remember and why? Of course you'll be forgotten in 10,000 years, I suggest you deal with your existential angst, rather than try to ensure that people remember you, graveyards are a waste of space. Of course, these comments are directed toward the "narrator", not the author.

I'm brown in the summer orange in the fall white in the winter And Spring reddens them all.

yes, that's the word. lyrical. excellent. 9.

this sounds really sincere and deep.. 8.

i can SEE this. 8.

exciting!

A lovely drama. I like the little moral at the end.