-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on moment in time by calilegzzz
11 Jun 2003, 4:30 AM
I no longer feel inclined to call you a capital fellow.
You hit the crucifixion nail right on the head 8
sweet little peice, very clear and convinently rhymed, good job !
i like that..it's eye cathing
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too bad its not a slot machine.
I am confused, especially by the title. too much of a mystery for me on this one.
Robert K Foster
on To those who'd share their heartfelt feelings with the world by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
11 Jun 2003, 5:02 AM
truth. Love it. 10
haven't
sing-song
Yu should almost never use the word "just". it is seldom necessary and it musddies up meaning bu softening the impact of your verb. perhaps "to" would be an apt replacement.
Bagina (aka) yeast trolley, mooseknuckle, curtaine o' beif. Bulva.
A subtle yet resonant piece. The colourful imagery and bewildering rhyme scheme are reminiscent of some of the later works of Tennyson, and even Chives. The rather pallid references to leukaemia, though somewhat out of place in a poeme about suicide, add a touch of humility that I feel is so badly lacking from contemporary western literature. This reviewer looks forward to anastomosis's next, even riper, comment deletion.
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Quite funny, not quite as good as some of your other stuff tho but still better than a lot of other stuff on here. Think it a bit garsh what God's wife said, there is some interesting and pretty rank imagery here (fish bones in throat....mmmm) shan't be trying it tho as i'm a veggie. (If i had a dog would i have t feed it greens...not real sure bout that one-thing it would piss outta it's arse) Check out me poem called mirror to mirror. GW had a bit t say bout that too!
A liverless giblet, tsk.
I like this very much, save the cliche' in the last line. you have talent. a solid 9.
I don't get the title.
bunch of mishmash
LIFT THAT BARGE!!!! TOTE THAT BALE!!!!
Nice fro, bro. Now mash yer motor.