I see an ad opportunity parasiticly charged. http://www.garageband.com/genre/raprock Scroll down, I'm the hot guy on the bottom staring at your ass. Hi, what's your name stud? Want a popper and a blow job? I fuck for cocaine, the stranger the better.

did you use a dictaphone for this baby?

is this a rhetorical question?

God hath given you one face and you make an ass of it

I compare thee to the contents of a diaper 3

you have got something going on here mirrored in other verses i have seen of yours. good going. am out of here.. spent!

I basked in your poem 8

Thou art violently carried away from grace. ---Henry IV, part I

infirm of purpose

And you people call me evil for saying twat? What? -=D_A=- You are semipermeably rotten. 11!

don't let the unhaired heads vex you. keep the words going til they lie right with your heartbeat.

be "stew'd'in brine, smarting in lingering pickle"

You scullion! You rampallian! You fustilarian! I'll tickle your catastrophe! ----Henry IV, part 2

miscreant, a powdered white hairpiece behooves you on this, a momentous occasion

"a heir" -> "an heir" You might try getting someone to read this aloud to you, and pick out where the flow seems off. (I stumbled all over the place; nearly broke an 'ankle'). And I'm not all too into the "I must capitalize the first word of every line and put a period at the end". It doesn't "go with the flow" for me. Lots of sentences arbitrarily chopped...

complex issues well beyond our ken

trim the cadence by breaking these lines in half at the beat point..... or not

grab a smoke, regain it and climb her again. she will surprise you when you peak.

go figure

huh?