-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on some deleted poem
4 Jun 2003, 5:09 PM
1. Make the first verse's rhythm less insipid.
2. Remove 'mere'.
3. Don't let anyone stand in the way of your dreams!!!
well, you've definitely made your point...
About time, where do I sign?
Well this is better than 90% of the stuff on poemeranker. I suppose that means I should rate it 9.
John K Song Extract Megapost
I thought it was time John K finally got some recognition among the serious poetes of the site, and the best way to do that seems to showcase the stunning variety of subject matter and style he has mastered.
Here, then, is a selection of extracts I feel really show what his songs have to offer! Remember, each of these is from a different song! ENJOY!!!!!!!!!!!!11111
"Weâll have the chance, another day
To sing and dance, to laugh and play"
"I know I need - youâre gentle touch
I guess that I - love you too much"
"Because she gives me a reason to get out of bed
And I just can't seem to get her out of my head"
"You are my reason to get out of bed
You're the person stuck in my head"
"Now we're just friends
I thought that it would never end"
"She makes me feeel like I'm on top of the world
She makes me feel like I don't need another girl"
"Have you ever seen two people madly in love?
They've been given a gift from their God above"
"I hope you know, how I feel about you
I love you girl, and I wish you knew"
"I used to be captivated by you
But now I know that we are through"
"I can't forget you, I can only try
I will remember you until I die"
"As I stand here watching my heart bleed
I know youâre the only one I need"
"A can of beer, that's all it will take
To make you steer in the wrong direction and break"
"No body sees you as you see yourself
You always act like you're somebody else"
"I never knew how much you meant to me
Never knew what you could do for me"
"I should've known better than to tell a lie
That doesn't mean you should say goodbye"
"I hope you know, how I feel about you
I love you girl, and I wish you knew"
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH A
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH A
YADDA YADDA YADDA B
DINGLE PRINGLE CAN'T U C
10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
A bold new sentiment! This is the first time anyone has ever expressed misgivings toward technology!!
Attacking lady bugs to the rescue would be recomended.
By the way: Tasteless plug
http://www.garageband.com/genre/raprock
http://darkangel.illfuckinghostit.com/bu
A personal favourite of mine, a poemranker must read for all.
That was the worst, really, you should hairdryer your pecker in a toilet (if you can reach the water, that is) immediately.
Oh holy jesus, a love "song" by John K. My monocle has popped off in surprise.
"deliberate hair" Good lord, help us from this poetic tyrant and his random noticing of deliberating hair.
Another must read.
The best.
Sure.
"The plug shaped yellow face" lol.
Dude, this poem should be torn appart and shot at you through a straw.
Parghhhhhhh
urnmphhhhhh
Mahrgggg
Whoumphhhhh.
Grrrrrrrunmph
plop.
I think this could be quite a good poeme if you made it better.
"Itâs patched and dented", "It's frozen claws": Its
"With in" (both times): Within
"Chilling my frightened blood/Even more": Show, don't tell.
Dismal, I LOVED IT!
a breath of fresh air. No wait, it smells like FUCKING in here you perverted little weasel! 9.9