wow, this sucks

Ok now. Make sure you pull this before I have a chance to decipher the latin. God knows we can't have any edumacated truck drivers running willy-nilly like all over the poemranker now, can we.

Quite an interesting story, reading the comments is almost as much fun.

I noticed this one is not arranged by Bill Murray...do you have another version or has this one not been edited as yet

You were my first random selection. I never have had any luck. Have you tried short stories?

I like this Jake. I think you could improve upon the poem with a few less commas. Do you read them aloud to see if it flows well? And it should be 'hoping.' The poem has a lot of depth and I think just needs a little tweeking. Peace,

"pour me a glass of apathy" ha..great opening line.. ..7?

Welcome to Poemranker. I am your host, William Zanzibar Bubbington III. "Boss, boss, ze prawne! Ze prawne!" Okay, I'm not really your host. I'm just a bored regular. Are you a singer/songwriter?

Wecome, to Poemranker Island! *sets up chair, sits down to wait for -=Dark_Angel=- "Ze prawne, boss!" "SHUT UP!"

Too tired to pick nits. Worth the read, definitely.

It's really beautifully poignant, Wulf.

It is thought-provoking, Vi.

A woman's heart is special, a woman has such class You will be very happy if she lets you fuck her ass

Fantastic, Bratsy. I guess my vote is somewhat tainted Though- Since Uncle Johnny is dad to me. Great work keep submitting

Bill Murray?! I loved him in "Groundhog Day"! This lyric reminds me of something that might be sung by Sheryl Crow or Joan Osborne or somebody.

this is a great poem - not! I suspect you are writing bad poems on purpose to receive recognition, of a sort, on the bottom 15. you get a ten.

an "instructor" of psychology? hmm.

Hmmm..... interesting (8)

Its good...i hope to hear it to music...sounds like country, or soft rock

I think it's cute.