-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on I hope not by colndodg
16 May 2003, 4:09 AM
Stupid but poorly executed, 7
Marvellous as always Mr. B.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
16 May 2003, 7:48 AM
Nein, I am how you say Sweedish and this insultsz me zo. Aber, zie bit about zie danes i like very muchs.
Lucky never slept with his mom. That's ridiculous.
mmmm ramen. i like the hot and spicy flavor.
Icarus poems ROCK!
I'm Unfamiliar
you've nailed down the sense of mystery--so much that I have no idea what the hell this is supposed to be. but I like it.
I'd like to see all these smurf ones a sone big series
I onece worked in a job where there was a rule about no bare midriffs. it was a rule meant for the ladies, I'm guessing becasue of the fear of horny bosses, but that's not important. what is important is that there was this ridiculously fat guy named jeremy who was fat in many ways, resembling a single celled organism. his belly used to sneak out of his shirt and hang down 6-8 inches below his belt, like jabba the hut's tongue.
I once worked in a job where there was a rule about no bare midriffs. it was a rule meant for the ladies, I'm guessing becasue of the fear of horny bosses, but that's not important. what is important is that there was this ridiculously fat guy named jeremy who was fat in many ways, resembling a single celled organism. his belly used to sneak out of his shirt and hang down 6-8 inches below his belt, like jabba the hut's tongue.
Hmmmm...I could be a foolish yes man like most other people on this site, but at the end of the day, this poem is a pile of pointless rubbish, but then again we've come to expect no more from you, so in one way its average, in another you could just be realistsic and say 'IT'S RUBBISH'
you know every line doesn't (and I'd underline "doesn't" if i could) have to rhyme. Give it a shot. Your rhymes sound kinna forced, maybe its just me.
I find it horribly ironic that dark angel is in the top 15 and bottom 15 all at once.
beautiful
Stupid but funny, 7
Great work! I especially like the way you repeat the first two lines for no reason!! 10!!!!
I like it.
nice toy theme, an excellent sense of playfulness
sma ll typo "shes" but a lovely poem.