Only until I forget what I was forced to learn about gravity.

Mediocre and barely caustic.

you could be a topless bottomless jew dancer. that can't write.

Cute, short and too the point I'll give you a 7 but its nearing an eight I guess poemranker must be a bit congested as im the first to rank this

nice original use of language but at times a bit distant

Well, the poem is unremarkable and Zionism makes me sick. I add to the pile of zeros my vote.

Kinda cRaZy but then i guess thats the whole point huh? Sometimes on this site i start to wonder how at what point does something stop being a poem and just because the writer says its a poem does that mean it actually is or is it just some words strung together? just a thought.

this is a piece of third grade crap in my opinion. theres nothing about it that will stand out, that will make me remember it. its something i might have read before from some lovestruck wanna be elementary school poet. try again, my dear. 0.

That scans really really badly. And it sucks. I dig your name though.

World Class. Strong from beginning to end. All that hard work has paid off. Mr. Vilanelle, good job with the close-up. Cut. Print. This poem is fucking beautiful. Thanks for the soul-kiss. I'm feeling better for it.

Terrific structure, just needs fleshing out. Give me your personal story. "The flower...to be." What causes the flower to die? Exactly, tell me. Is the seed never planted? Does it die of thirst? Take me to your childhood, I want to see it, walk it's streets with you. I want to see what you saw as a child. Can you give me that? I think your an interesting person. I bet you can tell an interesting story. What crash? What failure? what suggestion? Details, dress the story with the personality of the writer. The writer's personality, or sometimes the stories personality, is the only orginal thing a writer has to give. Details give excitement, interest.

"Etenity" that's a brand of hip hopper shoes right yo? lol.

This would have tremendous reverb with the proper editing.

In serious need of some cpr, but there is a glimmer of hope. "A shell for the earth, all seasons reverse. A life inside out in a jet-black hearse." Your opening, though, is fucking fantastic.

Yup.....hilarious stuff....tho u could have made it more amusing by putting in that crap bout the PROMISED LAND......hahahaha...but what i find even more funny is how stone throwing kid whose lands are occupied by people outta nowhere are labelled as fanatics....hahaha..guess Hitler's attributes rubbed off on some..really something to be proud of and i agree bout the just part too...lol

i don't like it

some cliches but pretty kewl imagery

hmm... i'll get back to u on this, but for now a 7

nice as always

I don't know, 'if' there?