Now that's breaking some fucking wind. lol! asl???

Try last line like this, "As you are killing me, slowly killing my fire." it has a nicer ring to it. -5-

Hey life's not fair. Just strive hard, money seemingly always goes to those who don't have a need for it, or use it sensibly. Think of 3rd world countries for instance.

That's so sickening you'd make a gay person straight so they don't have to be sexually interested in this poem. Here's 0 for pissing me off in my computer class.

Nice try, but there is no kale in this salad, no tongs and no bowl.

Awefully pretentious claim in your fourth stanza other than not bad -7-

Hey, i'm not a big fan of suicide, but understand at least to some extent how it comes about and how depression works. Seeing as i have written a lot of poems on suicide when i was depressed and because it helps me get it out, and also being a teen of similar mind (sometimes - i think) i'll give you a reasonable mark.

I think this deserves to be extended a bit. As you say it's about her isolating herself from other humans. Maybe talk about her children/ex-husband/sisters etc? I want to know more about your lady. do you know why she dislikes us so? Could you tell me that? What happened to her? Don't give it away, just give me a little hint, so my imagination can come up with its own scenarios. I think that would work really well with this story.

See now isn't it just like mommy always said. If you play with it too much.... Hey Your Supposed to be blind not have it fall off wtf?

Yeah I agree. It sux major hanus so many hours lost. Why do farmers need daylight saving? They get up at the crack of dawn anyway. -9-

thats deep.. I expected that from settle. But Z?-0-

Hmmmm.... nice descriptions. I like the face/glove simile. The subject matter is kind of dry but it's well written. 7

This is a change of pace. I never liked baseball, but I'll wait for the next part...

that's a fucking aneurysm my friend, totally unfixable. however you did a wonderful job complicating an uncomplicated and ancient structure (sonnets) and that's got to count for something somewhere. and the unaccessability of the piece? also, right off the fucking charts. Great job.

here. don't say i never did nothing for you.

GQTIP awarde. not that there's much competition tonight.

Bob all these losers over here should give Bob a standing ovation.......i mean eveytime i think this is his worst stuff......Bob surprises us.....well done Bob

does someone have a pincer so i can pluck out my eyes?

Good grief...

You sick people!