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absolutely beautiful

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I think Apollo is the wrong symbol here, how about dreamer, or hunter, archer...recruit?

19. syl. i would like to take this opportunity to say seamen eight and a half times seamen seamen seamen seamen seamen seamen seamen seamen sea great subject by the way.

So is it true that at risdi they pump you up to think you are special? Because, you are. I heard that from a Walloon named spivey.

Very good Shawn, yes, 500 will buy you a month with me any day. i am looking forward to cutting a new record with you, naturally, thanks for the article. i e mailed you my new number.

I think you're a genius. Can you make the ?'s turn into degrees? the last line weakens the entire structure. Re-think it.

Wow, now that's what pornography is missing on all kinds of levels. There area a few glitches here and there, but without those i don't believe this would be as good. Even god is flawed, by being at all. Here's A SWAGGER AWARDE. best poem i think i've read this week, easily.

jiminy Christmas somethings never change. Some rough spots, mainly S4, I'm too tired to take a serious look, overall I think it's strong and important.

im having such a good time putting down zeros for everything you have

quote on quote: no one cares about yuo not even your spleen

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I am finally finsihed after what i thought my last minutes on this earth i finally DID NOT read any of you poems or haikus thank the lord that i didn't it was easy judging by your titles they all sucked

O.K. Maybe its just the image of groping without the understanding of the metaphor thats being played out here or it could be that I just don't get the point of this one but this is my least favorite of your poems to date. Still a good poem it just hits me the wrong way. -6-

You managed to entrall my attention till the end with a tedious and unrefined grasp till the part about "examine the murder weapon". Then you derailed me back to not caring about your outcome. Your beginning could use work as well. -6-

When i was a young man growing up in southern ca. i skated with gator, and lance mountain a lot, but they did not write poetry this profound, but if they did think about all of the great tricks that would of never been invented. Perhaps you juggle? This poem has a long way to go, but you have to start somewhere i guess. What's your problem with razora? You are aware that in the writing spectrum she out classes you horribly, right? I don't think this deserves a zero, so here's a five.

because Apollo was everything, but a soldier, he was a philosopher, and musician among other things (sun dragger).