| Re: Ash by horus8 |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.210.249.88 |
3-Nov-06/5:11 AM |
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Badly punctuated.
Badly written.
Crap in short.
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| Re: Jesus Around Your Neck (Final Version) by Wakeboarder20 |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.210.249.88 |
3-Nov-06/5:14 AM |
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I am pleased I missed the previous version(s) - they must have sucked bigtime!
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| Re: James The Dashing Pirate by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.210.249.88 |
3-Nov-06/5:15 AM |
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Engelbert Humpalot 85.210.249.88 |
3-Nov-06/5:16 AM |
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| Re: Don't touch the chairs in a gay bar. by Stephen Robins |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.210.249.88 |
3-Nov-06/5:17 AM |
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This is excellent. Why was his stool hanging out? Had you answered that I would say 10/10. As it is it has to be an 8/10.
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Engelbert Humpalot 85.210.249.88 |
3-Nov-06/5:18 AM |
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You poems range from the realy excellent to the really crap. Guess which this one is. 1/10
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Engelbert Humpalot 85.210.249.88 |
3-Nov-06/5:20 AM |
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This is one of your better efforts. I have been to Australia which is a beautiful country inhabited by a load of twats plus the orientals and the abos.
Only the British could have hit on the delicious irony of shipping their convicts to such a nice place.
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| Re: Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.210.249.88 |
3-Nov-06/5:22 AM |
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Who's VioletSuede, Stevie?
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| Re: The Hunter, the Hunted, and the Bystander by Dovina |
INTRANSIT 152.163.100.6 |
3-Nov-06/6:31 AM |
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I'd like to know what this assholes problem is. (the driver of the car) And it's too wordy for my tastes. This one could do away with the formal stanzas.
Say, what other poetry sites are y'all using these days?
What is working for who and why.
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| Re: Poem for Mahmuth by Dental Panic |
INTRANSIT 152.163.100.6 |
3-Nov-06/6:36 AM |
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Shit. I liked the sadder wiser beers. Fuck. Has everyone out-read me here, too? Love the sounds. If it matters 10.
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| Re: 311006 txt to russia by daniella |
INTRANSIT 152.163.100.6 |
3-Nov-06/6:42 AM |
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Just -Text to russia- would work. I'd go with less nature oriented scheme.
New end: You unfold me in the morning. This could see a ten easy.
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| Re: The Hunter, the Hunted, and the Bystander by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
3-Nov-06/9:51 AM |
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Nicely iambic for the most part. Is this from a film?
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| Re: Footsteps by MacFrantic |
Dovina 70.38.78.229 |
3-Nov-06/1:17 PM |
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The sound is poetry. Maybe that's all that matters.
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| Re: heyyyyyy alligator by hottttwindnie |
Dovina 70.38.78.229 |
3-Nov-06/1:18 PM |
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"rhyming is hard" - Wrong!
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| Re: Left the key in dream den's door by capachijim |
InWonderLand 66.214.227.170 |
3-Nov-06/8:11 PM |
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| Re: For Elizabeth, Wherever She May Be by wilco |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
4-Nov-06/8:28 AM |
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Reads well, sounds better :-)
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Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
4-Nov-06/8:37 AM |
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There's some nice wordplay in here - fluent/fluid (embalmed), and 'wisens' works well with its double meaning. 'Carpet' may be a little too modern for the more historical language, or it might just be my nitpicking. I like it, but there's something nagging at me - I'll come back to this later and see if I can work out what it is.
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| Re: Toe Jam Poem by EDNA by Edna Sweetlove |
some deleted user 84.68.101.131 |
5-Nov-06/12:56 PM |
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ummm, did you see my poem, more suck than blow?? ummm, never mind...if i get a straw, i can do a juice extraction number, and save all the crusty bits for later.
now then sweety...do tell me bout budapest!
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| Re: So Easy by InWonderLand |
Sasha 128.135.197.7 |
5-Nov-06/8:07 PM |
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This poem doesen't hold any water. I have nothing to sink my teeth into; only a dim, colorless confessional atmosphere that is totally out of place. Give me some life!
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Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
6-Nov-06/9:45 AM |
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You're bored, aren't you?
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